Trying to get back to writing and I wrote a little bit of a style exploration for my original novel to see how it feels. It’s actually fun to write, but I don’t know how it reads. It’s very much a Zero Draft right now, but feedback is absolutely welcome.
To give the scene a little context: This is set in a world where experimental human/animal hybrids have been freed and live in their own small city/reservation on Coronado Island in California. The narrator is Owen, a rabbit thief who was contracted to help on a heist. He wasn’t told their target was a hybrid like him, one who’s never set foot outside of her lab before.
RD-01 has mostly been trained in science and lab work, but that was supplemented by a diet of 80s pop culture, particularly cartoons. She’s a relentless optimist in contrast to Owen’s pessimistic outlook.
The heist goes bad, as heists often do, and they barely manage to escape. Trapped in an abandoned section of the island, they’re now forced to find their way home. After she shoots down a half dozen options, RD-01 finally decides to go with Owen’s flippant suggest of calling her Pandora (since she’s a red panda hybrd). This is the first slower moment they have together, and it sort of sets up the dynamic of their relationship.
Like I said before, I welcome feedback and thoughts! It’s still a very rough draft and there’s more plotting to be done, but I’m just not sure if I’m going in the right direction for the book’s narrative feel. So feel free to drop a line and let me know what you think!
