Mmm I think ur writing is nice but it just sounds a little ChatGPT vibes ygwim? I'm not sure if ur using ai to help with ur writing but it sounds really generated and maybe why the other anon also say it's going in rounds which is usually what ai do?
hii anon, i totally get what you mean especially with how high the usage of ai is nowadays.. but i can assure you i do not use chagpt or any ai software to write my works! it’s no excuse but ive been unwell physically and a bit mentally since landing home.
i felt guilty since i wasn’t able to update as often as id like to while overseas and was trying to rush out a chapter and unfortunately it was not on the level people (and i) were satisfied with… especially as a first time poster
but i can see why you would get that vibe!! i’ll try my best to rewrite and also improve on my writing for future chapters and posts
i will go back and edit all my previous chapters to try to make it enjoyable for readers, so i’ll also apologise for all the delays and reworks :)