Review: Damage Assessment by FyreBirdRises
Damage Assessment
Rated: Teen and Up
Length: ~900 words
Pre-Epilogue Mockingjay
Peeta discusses his return to District 12 with Dr. Aurelius. It isn't Peeta that the doctor is worried about.
Damage Assessment is a bit longer of a drabble than FyreBirdRises' last drabble, The Phoenix, but the two definitely felt like they could fit together. This time, the story is told from Peeta's point of view and is set right before his return to District 12, but is able to provide insight into Peeta's recovery and the long road Katniss still had toward recovery. The explanation given by Dr. Aurelius seemed to fit what actually happened in Mockingjay when Peeta returned - why he wasn't necessarily surprised by her appearance but just accepted it and was so willing to help with her recovery when he still had so much of his own.
Again, for a new writer, I thought FyreBirdRises did a great job filling in some of the missing pieces in Mockingjay. One issue I had during this drabble was there were too many paragraph breaks during the dialogue. It was a little difficult to keep up with who was talking at which point in the story. A new paragraph often indicates a new thought or speaker, so I would suggest keeping dialogue from one speaker together. If it starts to look too blockish, it can get broken up with character actions (would they sigh or pause or maybe clean their glasses before continuing, for example).











