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[ryan-stoney]

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I thought this english meme was funny and at the same time kind of related to me as well. When I revise, even though I try and get all the errors I feel like I always miss a couple not matter how much I go through the piece of writing. 

[ashtonkendall]

Journal 13

This semester I definitely have seen my writing improve. Even though I don’t want to do anything in the future that involves a lot of writing I still believe the skills I learned will be useful. I am hoping to become a Nurse one day and with that career comes with a lot of reading. I will be able to use the tools I learned this semester to be able to analyze articles and journals in a more efficient way as well as knowing when a source is credible or not. 

[ryan-stoney]

I agree with you, I do not want a future were my writing is the biggest part of my career. But I think it is still important to have the skill if I need it.

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #13

You can translate your writing process outside the classroom by using the idea to attack problems and create solutions. By having the same structure to attacking problems in will be easier to approach these problems. If you just attack these problems without any structure you will have an issue solving them. The writing process is a great layout to use to help you solve problems outside the classroom. 

[kwalsh24]

Journal 12

The most challenging project for me was probably the rhetorical analysis. Rhetorical analysis’ were never really my strong suit because it was never really covered in high school, so for me it was a completely new topic for me. Now it was very well taught here, but something I had never done in the past so this was my first real shot at it. I do feel like my writing as improved significantly. I have learned several different pneumonics to help remember how to keep my reader’s interested in my works. It’s definitely something I want to use throughout my academic and professional life. 

[ryan-stoney]

Both of the most challenging parts of this semester was our rhetorical analysis. In my high school we only covered it for about a month and it left me with some questions still. I also agree that my writing has improved as well.

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #12

-What assignment has been the most challenging for you this semester and why?

For me I think the rhetorical analysis was the hardest for me. The reason being I have a hard time looking at things in a more figurative way rather then straight forward and factual. I also have problems sometimes find the ways the author was trying to convey their argument and if they argument was a good one or not. 

-How has your writing improved this semester? Be specific (if you feel it hasn't improved, you can say that, too).

I feel like my writing has improve this semester. I feel like I am more comfortable writing rhetorical analysis then I have ever been. I also feel like my choice of words when writing has gotten better as well, but I think I can still improve it even more. 

[jaylagreen]

In the article, Give Black Households More Economic power, the author mainly focused on if education and controlling for income would fix the economic gap, but I plan to discuss how there are other factors/elements that have also affected African Americans economic and financial positions.

1. I plan to discuss how African Americans are forced to have more credit card debit than Whites.

2. Also after graduating college, on average African Americans owe more student loans than Whites.

Logos are used in making the counter argument because the authors uses graphs and statistics from reliable sources. I believe the audience are people who want to learn more about why African Americans are at a financial disadvantage.

[ryan-stoney]

I think you did a really good job counter acting the counter claims you plan to address. I would escpacilly talk about and add facts and data to your second point to your answer to the counter argument. 

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #11

The counter argument I plan to address is if they commit a crime why should we not send them to jail?

-Firstly, to many people in this country are jail for minor drug crimes, especially African American. Instead of sending them to jail, either decriminalize weed, which many states are, or help them with rehab. 

-Secondly, just sending people to jail does not solve the problem. Data from the Bureau of Justice states that about 45% of federal prison inmates are rearrested in the 5 years after release. We need to help people get back on their feet and or help them so they do not commit the crime. 

When thinking about my audience, the biggest problem when it comes to mass incarceration are drug crimes. Which to me means older generation and people who do not want to decimalized weed. To me younger generations like our the most pro-weed generations in history. 

[sambrown84]

Journal 10

It is important to evaluate your sources because some sources could be untrue or biased. Evaluation of your sources will help you make sure they are correct and true. The most important thing I learned from Evaluating Sources is to scan the article to see if there are any red flags within the article. Red flags may mean that the source is not credible and you should not use it as a source.This will change how I read or think about an article because it will help me notice the red flags within an article and know if the source is credible.  From this information I will look for sources I know are credible such as PBS and History channel, and Britannica. This helped me realize how many unreliable sources there are and how to know if they are correct.

[ryan-stoney]

I agree with you about how you need to look at if the source is reliable or not. I also use History Channel and Britannica because they always have the facts and are not bias.

[ryan-stoney]

Journal 10

After reading the text, the most important part of evaluating sources is making sure the source is credible and reliable. While this can mean false information, it is mostly for finding bias in whatever source you are using. If you only use sources with one bias, your research will be swayed and you will not look at the other side of the argument. This is why, before I read the article, I make sure the source is reliable. I try and stay away from big new corporations because they have and agenda and the facts are always bias. I use scholarly, peer reviewed article and data from educational institutions because 9 times out of 10, they are studies done without bias. 

[vlg-at-uncw]

Journal 9

https://www.brookings.edu/articles/black-progress-how-far-weve-come-and-how-far-we-have-to-go/

Authors: Abigail Thernstrom and Stephan Thernstrom

Audience: Those too quick to dismiss, or have become blind to black progress. Most likely educated Americans as the article is published by a research group. 

Purpose: To shed light on often overlooked black progress.

Setting: 1998, the article was written before the recent rise of social justice movements. 

Format/Medium: Article in the by the American research group Brookings.

[ryan-stoney]

The title slide is very organized and appealing to the eye. The only thing I would change is bring the title down to close the gap of empty space. The article is very useful for their research, with facts and data to support her points. Yes, the article is written by an education institution, so it is reliable. The one thing that caught my eye the most was the blocks with the words are meaningful and organized. 

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #9

https://www.aclu.org/issues/smart-justice/mass-incarceration

-This author article supports my claim that mass incarceration in America today. They use logos to back up their claim and supports mine as well. They uses facts like, “Since 1970, our incarcerated population has increased by 700% ­­–  2.3 million people in jail and prison today, far outpacing population growth and crime.” This proposes the argument of my infographic, why is mass incarceration a problem in todays America, especially among minorities? 

[clbunce6]

This is the website that I found this graphic on: https://www.dismantlingracism.org/racism-defined.html

I found this graphic by searching on google for graphic representing racism. The audience is all Americans in hopes of bringing awareness to the prevalent systematic racism. The images purpose is to give a visual to the racial bias in the prison system. Through this visual representation, it is hard to ignore the disproportion. This graphic appeals more towards logos and stating undeniable facts. 

In CRAP the contrast is the imbalance between races and this contrast helps further their point. The repetition is stating the number of people in every race and making sure the same idea is being proven throughout all races shown. The alignment is shown by keeping all of the groups of people in the same size box and altering the size of the people to keep the alignment constant. For proximity the groups of different races are close in proximity to show they are all apart of the same group.

This graphic goes along with the first articles we read as a group and this idea of imprisonment reflects the same ideas in that article. We as a country need to be more educated and aware of the effects of systematic racism and we can learn this through visual graphics such as this one.

[ryan-stoney]

This inforgraph is very eye opening with the fact that minority have a higher chance of being unemployment. The biggest reoccurring theme I see when researching social injustice are logos. A lot of the infographs are straight facts and data collected from studies and research. 

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #8

I found this picture on a website called The Morning Call. I think the direct audience is the average American or more specify an independent voter. The purpose of this cartoon I believe is to show how two different sides of the political spectrum are arguing who is right over a phone call. It is using pathos to appeal to general public should be concerned that are politicians are arguing over a phone call instead of trying to make our country better.

C- Democrats think Trump is guilty and Republicans think Trump is innocent when it came to the Ukraine Phone Calls

R- The repetition is that both of them think they are right, which in the cartoon they both say, “I Told You!”

A- Everything in the cartoon is aligned with the only difference being the Donkey for the Democrats and the Elephant for the Republicans

P- Everything is organized and the ideas are put forth for the reader to understand easily 

[kwalsh24]

Journal 7

The tip I chose to write about is “A good lesson for any writer: make each sentence worth reading, and something in it will lead the reader into the next one”. This particular piece of advice stuck out to me because I personally have an issue occasionally adding “fluff” into my writing and I think that utilizing this tip when writing could really work to my advantage. Additionally, it helps me maintain my focus on the topic at hand and not run off on irrelevant subjects. The piece said “If a writer’s sentences have enough life and interest in them – with “every step an arrival”, as Rainer Maria Rilke put it – they will hold the reader and move the writing along.” which proves that you’d need to keep your writer interested in the piece. This was definitely an interesting read 

[ryan-stoney]

I think is very important to make the sentence worth reading. If you make the sentence boring and bland, the reader is gonna lose interest and not want to read your writing anymore. 

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #7

The part of the essay that struck out to me was when it said, “A sentence is much more than its literal meaning. It is a living line of words where logic and lyric meet – a piece of both sense and sound, albeit the sound is only heard in the reader’s head.” Although this a more well know part that makes up a good sentence, I still struggle with. For me, I struggle with the figurative and lyrical part when I write. In high school, when we would do stuff that we would have to find the figurative meaning, I would struggle. So for me this part stood out because it is something I need to work on. 

[jackentwisle1]

Journal #6

In some of my previous peer reviews, I found that the most helpful things to me were grammar and punctuation corrections, along with wording of my sentences. I also tend to write run-on sentences quite often so it is helpful to have someone go back and show me how I can shorten things up a bit. I dislike when people put others down about others writing when reviewing their essays, especially when it comes to more sensitive subjects that people care about deeply. 

[ryan-stoney]

I agree with you here, especially when you talked about fixing punctuation, grammar, and wording. Run-on sentence is something I do often as well, and totally forgot about how people have help me fix those in the pass. I also agree with how it is bad to put people down because you do not agree or like the writers essay, 

[ryan-stoney]

Journal #6

-The best type of suggestion when doing a peer review is like grammar and making the reading sound better. Suggestion other word choices that the writer would not think about. 

-I feel like the worst is trying to change the whole topic or trying to prove someones claim is wrong. Now if the claim is completely wrong, I get it it, but trying to prove or change something that you do not agree with is not helpful. 

-I like being able to see someone, who looks at writing differently then me, being able to read and critique it.