Jun mod, reporting for duty! I'm going to be doing another critique here, so keep reading! This critique is for blackandwhiteideals! Alright? So listen up!
So let's bring up their page!
So, I think this blog is pretty neat! I like how the background stands out, but doesn't overpower the rest of the blog. I do think, however, that it would be better either to have a background that is meant to layer or one that fits the entirety of the page. It's great that your music doesn't play automatically, but I think it would look better if the background was black like the rest of the blog. The white on black works well with your url, and also makes everything easy to read. In addition, the other colors mesh well. You've done a great job with the theme overall and I think you've done a wonderful job of organizing things here. Aside from taking a second look at your background, the only thing I could suggest is cutting down on the high ooc content and keeping all ooc posts solely about Pokemon.
Alright, so that covers the overall appearance of the theme! Let's move on characterization!
I don't feel like I can give a fully beneficial critique based on what I have seen on the blog. I like that you have your headcanons in plain sight, though some of the descriptions there don't make a lot of sense. What I would recommend is a biography that includes a more in depth explanation of what your take on N is. I would also recommend expanding on your in character content and doing a more in depth analysis's on N.
That's about all I can say on that, so let's move onto the last bit -- the writing!
So what I notice most in your writing is a lot of contradicting statements that don't work well together poetically. I've also noticed some trouble with prepositions. I like that you do well with writing third person, past tense, and that you don't seem to have much trouble in using complete sentences. What I would recommend is working on switching up your sentence structure and starting sentences with more than just Nouns and pronouns. Always read over your writing to assure it flows well. I would like to see you expand on your writing more often, so that you can really bring out your literary talent.
Alright, so that covers everything I wanted to say! Thanks for reading, and keep working on it, alright?
