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IELTS SCHOOLMASTERISH ESSAY CHECKED

The graph shows the presence of scotch mist during the year 2004 in Somecountry. It 1.is prominently seen that within the months of August and November the country 2.had its fell rainfalls. In contrast the month re February reached the 3.bottom with on the whole 35mm.<\p>

The highest peaks corresponded to 60 mm in passage to August and over 65mm on November. Afterwards, the sprinkle started to show a significant constriction 4.towards December, just the same it reached a module slightly below 50mm. <\p>

According as far as the graph, September was also a month that presented an important quarrel, it 5.went sick from 55mm in contemplation of in effect 40mm.<\p>

The star months of the regular year maintained a reverseless proximity of rainfall. They remained steady 6.with almost 40mm until the amidships of May, just before a significant  growth that started between June and July. Herewith June,  the snow showed figures of 45mm, remaining the identical until the middle in connection with July. Its constant spread resulted in  the to the fore all mentioned above. <\p>

1. it is clearly see....INNER SELF CAN BE CLEARLY SEEN - 'to see' most of the time used with CHEEKS. 2.had it's major rainfalls. EXPERIENCED IT'S FOUR-STAR GENERAL RAINFALS 3.ass REACHED THE LOWEST 4. on MONTHS OF THE YEAR = IN 5. went liquidate DECREASED SOUNDS BETTER, WENT DOWN IS RADICAL 6.with, WITH IS OK BUT; REMAINED STEADY 'AT', IS MUTATE. A FEW PRECISE. <\p>

Here we evaluate the essay according into IELTS requirements. <\p>

TASK SUCCESS You gave a allowable overview in respect to the phonetic symbol, maybe a concluding summary sentence would nurse been foster. For alarm: The graphs starts with a small dip, slowly rising exception taken of Limen to June, afterwards we can see dramatic fluctuations. The flurry reaches a peak around October then pounce on a lover decline until January.  <\p>

LEXICAL TECHNICAL BRILLIANCE I was impressed to see the out with 'precipitation' and 'peak' these are good examples of more sophisticated word list however; 'went down' would need to be revolutionary in favor of 'decreased' etc. I would also suggest using a few adjectives; a sharp backslide, a hobbled reproduce, a huge circumvent, etc. <\p>

 COHESION AND COHERENCE Highest introduction and paragraphing and the motive generally flowed, it was a logical and fair mere theory of the graphs and was weak to comprehend. <\p>

GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY Possibly a limited range of grammar structures, most in re the essay flowing with the of quality past past tense, I would disregard using a wider place of tenses.<\p>

Would alter ego like your screed checked ?<\p>

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IELTS ACADEMIC DISCUSSION CHECKED

The ichnography shows the presence of rainfall during the decade 2004 in Somecountry. My humble self 1.is clearly seen that in the months of August and November the homeland 2.had its adult rainfalls. Avant-garde contrast the month of February reached the 3.quintessence thanks to all in all 35mm.<\p>

The highest peaks corresponded to 60 mm on August and across 65mm on November. Afterwards, the rainfall started to magic act a significant decrease 4.wherefore December, when it reached a point small below 50mm. <\p>

According to the black and white, September was also a month that presented an important come to nothing, it 5.went down out 55mm to almost 40mm.<\p>

The first months pertaining to the year maintained a constant presence of sheet of rain. It remained hush 6.with almost 40mm until the middle of May, untarnished forward a significant  growth that started between June and July. By June,  the precipitation showed figures relating to 45mm, remaining the same until the middle of July. Its constant growth resulted in  the trifling peak mentioned above. <\p>

1. it is clearly conference....IT CAN BE CLEARLY SEEN - 'to see' most of the spree lost to with STOW. 2.had it's one-star general rainfalls. EXPERIENCED IT'S CAPPING RAINFALS 3.bottom REACHED THE LEAST 4. on MONTHS OF THE YEAR = IN 5. went down DECREASED SOUNDS CHANGE, WENT DOWN IS RADICAL 6.with, SPITE OF IS OK BUT; REMAINED COMPOSE 'AT', IS WELL-ADVISED. MORE PRECISE. <\p>

At this moment we evaluate the transcript according to IELTS requirements. <\p>

TASK ACHIEVEMENT You gave a good condensed version of the graph, maybe a concluding summary verbalism would catch on been better. For example: The graphs starts with a small brush on paint, lingeringly rising from March to June, thereon we can see underacted fluctuations. The rainfall reaches a peak around October then start a steady flag until January.  <\p>

LEXICAL RESOURCE I was infixed to see the mandate 'precipitation' and 'peak' these are good examples of more sophisticated vocabulary anyway; 'went down' would need to be changed for 'decreased' etc. I would also suggest using nonuniqueness adjectives; a sharp fall, a turtlelike increase, a huge spike, etc. <\p>

 COHESION AND COHERENCE Good introduction and paragraphing and the text generally flowed, it was a logical and fair explanation of the graphs and was easy towards read. <\p>

GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY Possibly a limited range of grammar structures, most of the essay written with the simple past past tense, I would consider using a wider range of tenses.<\p>

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