Notes #4
Before receiving any feedback, I already knew that my first analysis lacked clarity despite having read the book and captured many ideas that were suggested by the text. When I read the feedback, I was not surprised that I started out with good ideas but that they became lost when reading my analysis. It was understandable, I say, because I felt lost doing the assignment myself. If I were to revise my analysis, I would clarify the difference between "servants, men," and etc. from the Tempest . This would allow the reader to know where I am heading with my analysis--that is, to explain if there is a pattern where servants seem to have more or less knowledge than those who would be considered higher-rank than them. In this play, the phrase that "Knowledge is power" is taken to the extreme as I tried to convey my idea that servants that obtained useful secrets would be able to use it to their advantage and try to achieve social mobility as we see Gonzalo using his knowledge as to when Prospero goes to bed, usually, in order to have Sebastian kill him in order to be free from Prospero.
My main struggles are two things: first, I need to be more concise with my ideas and second, is actually coming up with a topic that would interest me and encourage me to write my thoughts rather than having to rely on classroom discussions to stimulate any ideas.