"not sure what this paper is about, you should outline what topics you will be covering"
MAYBE YOU SHOULD KEEP READING THE REST OF THE INTRODUCTION AND YOU'LL SEE THAT I DID THAT TWO SENTENCES LATER YOU NIMWIT
"you should only use scholarly journal articles"
UM NO EXCUSE YOU THE PROFE OOPS I MEAN THE DIRECTOR OF THIS FREAKING COURSE SAID THAT WE CAN USE NEWSPAPER ARTICLES AS WELL AND FRICK DID YOU SEE HOW MANY SCHOLARLY ARTICLES I USED. HOW MANY DID WE NEED TO USE? THREE. I USED MORE THAN THREE. AND ON TOP OF THAT, A NEWSPAPER ARTICLE. WHAT IS YOUR PROBLEM
YES MA'AM THAT'S BECAUSE I EXPLAIN IT IN THE NEXT SENTENCE YOU POTOITRE
"vague" "unclear" "vague"
MADAM, DO YOU READ? DO YOU HAVE ANY APPRECIATION FOR CREATIVITY? ANALOGY? DO YOU KNOW HOW MUCH WE'VE TALKED ABOUT ANALOGY IN THIS COURSE? I EXPLAINED THAT ANALOGY AT THE BEGINNING OF THIS ESSAY AND YES I KEPT GOING BACK TO IT AT THE END OF EACH ARGUMENT. OH. HOW TERRIBLE OF ME. I'M FREAKING PROUD OF THAT ANALOGY WHERE IS YOUR IMAGINATION
"relate to Butler and her.. blah blah blah"
NO I WILL NOT THIS ESSAY IS ALREADY DONE. YEAH I CONSIDERED USING BUTLER IN THIS BUT AFTER MUCH DELIBERATION I DECIDED THAT HER THEORIES DIDN'T FIT WITH WHAT I WAS TRYING TO SAY SO LEAVE ME ALONE YOU GRUMBLING COW
there are literally whole paragraphs and pages with no comments at all. nothing to tell me what gave me that insulting percentage. I would assume that no comments meant you didn't have a problem with those parts? so what made you take 30% off my essay? the fact that you have no imagination? THANKS