@nitrodax233
Hello again! Hope yall are having a great summer so far!Here is the last of my original 11 trolls. I ended up scrapping the 12th one.
<.< welllll by the time im getting to this it’s almost summer again soooooooooo
World: Alternia
Name: Veerke: (Dutch) This name has several variations such as Veer (Dutch) and Vera (Several but primarily Russian) which means Faith and is sometimes associated with the latin word of Verus which means True.
Luniac: (Roman Mythology) A variation of Lucina which is derived from Latin lucus meaning “grove”, but later associated with lux “light”. This was the name of a Roman goddess of childbirth.
Okay, yeah this is a pretty coherent theme of “purifying flame!” I will say “Luniac” is a little on the nose, so maybe just flip some of the vowels? Lunayc, maybe? Age: ~7
Theme/Story: As you mentioned before with Tahila, Veerke is a more direct reference to the elements with hers being Fire. Story wise there is not much going on for them since they were always the odd one out. The only thing I really have for them is to later help with defusing Haneul. [Here is a quick thought, Ever since she was very young, she has run into trouble with her kind of “Psionics” which has left her as a high target for the highbloods. She has been keeping low ever since then and tries to avoid large crowds.]
Review Goals: Since I’m not very good with making trolls, especially back when I made these original 11, a general look-over would be appreciated.
Strife Specibus: Flamethrowerkind
I think that’s pretty on-the-nose, but if you want a variant that’s a little more tongue-in-cheek maybe she uses bottlekind and throws molotov cocktails? Fetch Modus: Cartridge: captchalogues items by converting them into code on a cartridge similar to those used in the Game Boy. To retrieve items from this modus, one would need to insert the cartridge, wait for the antiquated modus to load the game and then produce the item, and the item would be ready for use. Items captchalogued hastily or carelessly may be glitchy and need to be debugged before proper withdrawal.
Hmmmm. If you want something more in line with her theme, maybe she uses her psiionics to burn away the captcha card while leaving the item intact? It plays in nicely with the complications you mentioned with her powers.
Blood Color: Rust
Lunar Sway: Prospit
Title: Sylph of Hope
Symbol and Meaning: Since I made them waay before the EZ, I think it is based off of a ł from the western Slavic language
Huh. I mean Arnius, Sign of the Heedless, actually looks fairly similar to that, with the added benefit of looking like a shepherd’s crook! You might wanna consider doing a one-crook version of it!
Handle: adoxyCampology
Hmmm. You don’t explain why you gave her this trolltag. “Adoxy” could possibly mean “without belief,” which is REALLY interesting given her name, so I’m inclined to let that be but “campology” I think means…the science of camping??? Which doesn’t track quite so neatly to her.
I seem to recall that you wanted to keep initials the same, and mention that she likes the snow, so maybe we play off that contrast? What about adoxyColdsnap, both because she likes snow and because she has to keep herself “cold” avoid setting off her pyrokinesis.
Quirk: łiterally something łike this
I think that looks good even if you end up modifying her symbol as suggested!
Special Abilities: They have an advanced form of pyrokenisis, like Neasar with sound manipulation, she can manipulate the flames themselves. The catch is that they intensify with her emotions, so if she is in a lot of stress her powers are more difficult to control.
Lusus/Guardian: My guess would be a Lizard, like a great bearded dragon.
Given her affinity for snow, I sort of want to give her Not A Lizard. Consider a caribou with flaming horns to light the way through the snow? It could cut an absolutely nightmarish silhouette in the night.
Interests: Surprisingly enough, she enjoys the snow and the coziness that comes with it. Besides that, she loves to collect rare stones and blow glass.
Personality: With the advent of her pyrokenisis being so destructive so fast, she has adapted a calm and cautious mindset, not letting her emotions get the best of her. She has been known to be easily tangled into other’s business despite their interjections. Though she has fallen far into others business, she does it out of the care for those who she can trust but due to her lack of social contact she may seem naive at times.
Land: Land of Candles and Reflections
Ehhh even though I can see how it connects it rings a little generic. Maybe Land of Faith and Foundries, covered in molten metal and temples to the Hero of Hope? It would be VERY difficult for her to stay calm there, and she would presumably need to work extensively with pyrokinesis and forges to complete her denizen’s quest.
Other than that, Veerke seems like a pretty good troll! I hope the review helped!
-TR