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I am looking for some queer/WLW/sapphic readers to read an excerpt for a novel I am potentially working on.
The excerpt is quite short, as I would like to know if I have semblance of skill/knack for writing before I commit further to writing.
The “book” has no title presently
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As it is just an excerpt (488 words) I am not looking for professional beta readers just yet. Just looking for a group of peers in my community to see if they enjoy it! So if you are a professional who charges for your service I thank you for your interest, but my work isn’t near such stages.
Context for story:
Genre: romance and mystery.
Themes: Vampire, gothic, Queer, WLW, Masc MC.
The excerpt you will read is from the POV of Daphne who works for a national trust house as a tour/information guide (those not in the UK, national trust homes are historical houses owned by the trust that are used almost like museums. People can enter these historical homes by buying tickets, look around and learn about the history of the house and those that lived there.)
In the year she has worked there, she has developed an attachment and obsession for a particular portrait in the home.
In this excerpt you will read her describing and seeing the portrait.
If you would be interesting in reading this short excerpt please let me know! I am looking for the following feedback but I also welcome all comments and critiques that you may have.
Let me know:
- Were you able to follow easily what was being described to you and build an image in your head?
- Did you want to read on and learn more by the end of the excerpt?
- Did the sentences flow? Or were you tripping up?
- Was there adequate description OR too much perhaps?
- Was tense and punctuation used well and or incorrectly?
Please message or comment here if you would be interested in reading! I will happily email it over.
And thanks so much in advance.
- Romeo