I think what’s most noticeable is your dialogue! Both inner dialogue and what’s actually spoken! I’m bad at articulating this kind of stuff but the way you write her dialogue really jumps out and feels engaging and fun - especially seeing her inner dialogue and thoughts - it just gives her so much more character and makes writing with you all the more fun and amazing!
@electricea! || what is most noticeable abt my writing?
RUDIEEEE ILYSB !!!!!! i actually put a great deal of thought / consideration into my dialogue so this is super duper sweet ... n i'm so glad its seen :') u are an angel
