shatterrealm replied to your photo “This is a story I’ve been working on. Finally got it refined enough...”
There are details to how this world works that haven't been revealed yet, which I like! Though I feel I'm not initially given a "question" to make me curious to read the first chapter. Keep it up!
Thanks for the critique! You make a good point about the first chapter needing a “hook” to catch a readers attention. I’ll have to really think about this and see what I can do to spruce up the first chapter.
The first and second chapter were originally written as one chapter. I discovered that Tapas has a letter limit (cry) and I had exceeded it twice over. So I had to cut the first chapter in half and just hope for the best. Several chapters are like that. So if the cut off seems strange, or it seems like a half story, it’s because I had originally written longer chapters and then had to chop them up to smaller bit-sized pieces.
The nice thing about a first person story is you only know as much as the character, and only when they actually think about or react to something. It’s a good control mechanism for me, to keep me from over-explaining things. Because I love world building and there’s a very real temptation to dump everything on people all at once, lol.