60.0 - 70.0 :: 'affectionate issue #1' by various, edited by taylor everett
'affectionate issue no.1' by various, edited by taylor everett // affectionate, 2k13
60.0 - 70.0
want to start this off by saying that i really like the format of this ebook, i encourage other publications to consider using 'issuu.com' in the future
also i think the design is v good, easily digestible
i think aesthetically it's a cute mag, i like how my head feels when i am reading it, seems v classy/sophisticated & although it is new, it immediately has a certain air abt it that i think has p big potential
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'the architecture of an empty skyline' by patrick trotti
shouts out to feeling invisible, i 'feel u' patrick trotti
good 40oz reference
i'm liking the short and blunt sentence structure, but i'm not a fan of how he often sharply begins them with verbs. idk, i understand when it's used via fb, twitter when people leave out pronouns that would usually start off a sentence but it feels a bit 'cheesy' here
this reminds me a lot of my writing, like, i can't tell what's wrong with it but something abt it seems too 'easy' i think
a little confusing, but it held my attention, so it seems like he did a 'p good job' that way
it's a romantic way of writing, but it's kind of like 'enough already', kinda cliche, w/e
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'i want you to hurt my face again' by J.M.C. harvey
oh my GOD this is a good love poem
it 'makes sense' to me
harvey isn't trying too hard either
it's not annoying, the words fit the sentiment rlly well
and it's not dumb shit either, it's 'powerful' and 'beautiful'
not 'cheap' at all
it's a surreal poem but also has a lot of reality in it, idk how he did it, tbqh i'm kind of blown away
'paradoxical' in a sense
loved // 'i want you to feel this same feeling, even if it is not directed towards me'
like, holy shit
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'evelyn' by katherine duckworth
immediately dislike the use of 'bc' which may seem hypocritical as per the style of this review site but i don't think that it rlly fits with her style
unsure really what's happening, unsure if i like it or not
'crystal says' by duckworth
thought 'ok'
'dumb again' by duckworth
'i called you today to ask a dumb question', that's the only thing i liked from that particular poem
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'bog bodies' by victoria sleazy
i like the image of rain coming & wrestling someone free
i like the 'creepy'/'sinister' feeling i get from this poem
smiling at nothing, free from skin' is v good, i love the idea/image of skeletons being separate from our bodies, idk, that's what this reminded me of
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'barking at the ocean' by andrew schneider
'why chromosomes' is effing brilliant
also like the 'x's on the back of your hands', v good
idk, this poem seems simple and the little changes he makes to 'normal things' to make them a bit surreal and poetic is nice
it's not too much, not annoying, or overbearing
damn, this was good, feel interested in reading more by this person
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'i want to be a peregrine falcon' by stephen michael mcdowell
immediately feel an aversion to all caps, seems rlly unnecessary
or, maybe it works, maybe i get it
i like the 'uhh' in it, gives the poem a sense of urgency & helps justify the all caps
like that he's recalling all the information his brain has 'stored' re: this specific type of falcon
seemingly 'random' break in poem to explain why the poem was written this way fits into the recollection of falcon things
the ending is good, i just don't rlly get the 'point' of this poem i guess
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'beach beneath the pavement' by laurels verdonkschot
woah, seems like a lot is 'going on'
i like 'specks on your collarbone' but i feel like too much happens too soon after that
Darcy and Wednesday walked down the aisle of the passenger train to their seats. Darcy had headphones around the back of his neck and wore a backpack. Wednesday had brought a small suitcase and carried a bag under her arm.
They found their seats and sat down.
“You alright?” asked Darcy as Wednesday sat in the aisle seat beside him.
“Yeah,” said Wednesday. Her eyes were empty, as if her focus had been interrupted. She turned and looked straight ahead.
Darcy looked out of the window. Still trees were dusted with snow from the night before. He checked the time on his phone. They were on schedule. The sun was shining.
“Hurry up and wait now, I guess,” said Darcy, with a half smile.
Wednesday looked down at her fingernails.
Darcy looked out of the window again as the train left the station. It was warm on the train. He put in his headphones and turned on some music.
Wednesday took out her phone and opened the messages app.
Wednesday: train just left
Chad: see you at 8, excited :)
Darcy paused his music and took out one of his headphones.
“You’re sure you don’t mind if I go out with my dad tonight? I can cancel. I’d rather hang out with you,” he said to Wednesday.
She quickly locked her phone and turned to look at him.
“No no, it’s fine, really, you should go.” Empty.
Wednesday put her phone back in her bag and pretended to take a nap.
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Taylor Everett is currently a musician/poet/writer living in London, Ontario, Canada. He tweets here and blogs here.
