Project 3 | PART 2e CRITIQUE for someone else's work
for the Testclip of Ethan (http://ethanroberts.tumblr.com/)
From the positive side of critique, the clip (#DSDN101) shows a colourful beginning and end, that both (re)capture the viewers’ attention for the clip itself. The nearly clean white background (what suits the idea of a hand drawn stick figures) and the drawings work well together. The red-colored highlights within the clip are very useful to lead the viewer’s eye.
But of course, there are some enhancements that could be considered. The clip’s coverpages at the beginning and the end seem to have no relationship to the central clip in terms of drawing style and coloring. It might be furthermore helpful to choose identical colouring for the two pages to create a stronger framing.
As the stopmotion in the middle of the clip is only about 2s long the viewer cannot understand all the shown pictures (especially as the scene changes within these two seconds) because the viewer is not able to catch all images and their relationship. This could be easily improved by splitting the actions into more paper-drawings and by reducing the overall pace of the clip.
As the pencil thickness and impact differs within the drawings. It might be helpful, to agree on one drawing-style to follow and to re-work the pictures on Photoshop before matching them into the clip.