#thepowerofthehijab

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Layout- Version 2- From Vive

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Layout- Version 3- From Vive

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Layout- Version 1- From Vive

Own Notes:

the background graphics are a quite intense and clash with the already rich images

go for a cleaner background

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Production Form

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Layout Sketch

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The Power Of The Hijab by Michelle Kimm- Edited- VERSION 2

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The Power Of The Hijab by Michelle Kimm- Edited- VERSION 1

Could you, for the rythm, make P say this? That she ends with 'We want to break free from..... etc - just a suggestion to break up the length of some answers I edited:

Overall language check

The streamers- made them shorter, snappier and in the form of a deconstructed sentence

Caption under the images- made them shorter and more informal

The intro- separated it in 3:

Intro to the overall article

Profile of Perrine

Profile of Meryem

Feedback from Bregje:

Intro: Well done for the edit; the extra info is useful and the rest is good to follow

Second to last question on page 3: Could you, for the rythm, make P say this? That she ends with 'We want to break free from..... etc - just a suggestion to break up the length of some answers

Streamers: I like the short streamers like this 

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The Power Of The Hijab by Michelle Kimm- ORIGINAL

Text file:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jwMgBct_A0Vi3G9IaC6Ccg2scGMwuLl4Rpb2iyIlUzI/edit?usp=sharing