Original Sin is an interactive story. Your decisions will affect relationships, power, and the fate of multiple realms. Some routes may include dark themes, violence, and emotional conflict. Player discretion is advised.
And that every soul ends up exactly where it belongs.
They will not tell you about are the mistakes. About the miracles that went wrong and the lives caught in the space between divine judgment and human sin.
You were never meant to exist.
And yet… here you are. A soul that should not be possible.
A variable in the system never accounted for.
Angels and Demons are watching you closely and something ancient is more than aware.
Who's side are you on? What will you become?
Are you here for salvation—
—or damnation?
Features:
Play as male, female, or nonbinary — straight, gay, bisexual or no romance at all!
Choose your name and your pronouns and how the world of Concord addresses you.
Three gender selectable romance options and four set genders.
Show mercy, hold the line, or embrace ruthless resolve.
Navigate celestial politics, hidden agendas, and fragile alliances.
Shape your power, reputation, and the fate of those around you.
Choose who you become by choice. Angel, Demon or something different?
Romance Options: first three have bigger plots to the overall story.
CAELIS (f/m) —
Tall. Composed. Every movement is intentional. Their features are sharp in a quiet, commanding way. . Their wings are immaculate. Pale feathers layered with dark feathers perfectly, broad enough to shield without effort. When they unfurl, the air shifts — not violently, just decisively. Being near Caelis feels like standing beside something ancient and steady. Like a cathedral that learned how to walk.
VEX (f/m) —
Tall. Taller than a lot of people. Dark hair that never quite behaves but never looks accidental either with a pale complexion to match. Eyes that rest half-lidded, watchful, always cataloguing. Their expression tends to hover somewhere between faint amusement and complete detachment. Their wings are sleek and controlled. Clean lines. Precise symmetry. Rarely fully spread. They keep them close, tucked in, disciplined.
M (f/m) —
Lighting hits them differently than it should. Like their features settle a half-second too late. Their expression is unreadable in a way that doesn’t feel cold — just distant. Observing from somewhere slightly removed. Their wings are darker, their iridescence faint, flickering when they move. Nearly silent. Nearly weightless. So out of the ordinary.
ELIO (m) —
Elio smiles, and the rooms brighten up. Light skin that seems to hold light naturally. White-blonde curls that refuse order. Eyes that give everything away — curiosity, worry, delight — all of it. Their wings are expressive in the same way they are. Gold-tipped feathers that shimmer when they move, rarely held still. They react with every emotion like punctuation marks in midair.
ZIVA (f) —
Bright eyes. Sharp grin. Dark tightly curled hair pulled back in a way that suggests she tried to make it neat and immediately gave up. She moves fast — talks faster — and somehow always seems two steps ahead socially. Tall, slender, with a dark complexion. Her wings are vibrant, feathers edged with subtle shifting tones that flash when she gestures. And she gestures constantly. Ziva is chaos — but the fun kind.
ATHOS (m) —
Athos looks as if he was built to hold the line. Broad shoulders, black skin. Solid stance. The kind of physical presence that makes space without asking for it. His gaze is steady, assessing — not unkind, just direct. His wings are dense and powerful, darker feathers layered thick like armour. When they spread, it’s not graceful — it’s imposing. The air moves because they decided it should.
LIORA (f) —
Liora looks like quiet light, the only difference between her and her brother is her hair is long and white-blond, he has curls. She has soft features. Gentle eyes. The kind of expression that makes you lower your voice without realising why. There’s patience in the way she moves — unhurried, careful. Her wings glow faintly at the edges, gold and ivory blending like sunlight through stained glass. When fully spread, they feel less like a display and more like shelter. Standing near Liora feels safe. Even when nothing else is.
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Hellooo, dear author. I hope you are doing well. Whenever i find an IF i like these days, i do however looks at the writer like 👀 because I've found that all good IF authors have a sadistic undercurrent to which they make us suffer through said good writing. So I'm watching you 🤣
Moving on, i would like to say I like the characters i have met so far. Dk for sure who the ROs are besides V and C tho. Sorry if i butcher the names. I have a horrible memory.
Elio is an adorable bean baby and should not be harmed at all.
Ziva is a diva love it for her!
Athos?? Idk if thts right lol sorry. I kinda want to just make a very sunshine mc to interact with them. They seem way too damn serious....even tho i generally find that attractive in characters.
Liora seems as adorable as her brother. Family just full of golden retrievers then.
Hypothetically, how much trouble would i get into if i created a toxic love triangle with C and V... just hypothetically????
Lol, i do like your writing, really. I get drawn to characters, and i like yours a lot. I hope all the bug reports and fixing don't get you down, too. Bugs in an IF, especially in the beginning, are standard practice for everyone. Choicescript if from the devil. So don't stress it too much. Good luck with it all, and I'm looking forward to the next update. 💕
I blabbed a lot so I placed it under a keepreading so it doesn't block anyone's feed🤣🤣! Some of these asks honestly you're so kind💕 Thank you so much. <3
I really, really appreciate the vote of confidence because coding has been something else but I've been working on OS for about three months (and didn't realise I should be bug testing on COGDemons consistently lolz) so it's got a bit of fixing to do (hoestly atp I might rewrite on from where it's bugged because the last half of the chapter is so fun to me its annoying no one can get there yet) which makes me also sad because so many people seem to really like it. But we will prosper. I am determined and I don't have much of a life anymore so I'm more than happy to let writing take over!
I might post the slice-of-life socialite/drama one I've been doing for funsies on the side because I love drama and angst lol -- and to answer your love triangle question -- yes. In fact, the main Romance Options could technically put you in a messy square before you know it. 🤣
The other ROs are smaller roles but still important at the end game!
These are just some other mistakes I found. Also, maybe with the customization for the hair. Just an idea maybe have it where we can choose the length, style, and color separate. Just bc I like doing long, wavy hair 😅 like I notice, i can choose wavy, I just dont know the length, lol
But overall, I am enjoying this. Also, who the hell are the Ros? Bc umm idk which ones are lol 😅 but Vex and Caelis got my interest and the person we meet in the wrong wing. Lol, also, will we learn why our wings are so sensitive? 👀 looking at Vex touching them. Also, will we meet the dragon again?
Thank you! People can play a bit further, still a little buggy.
I can absolutely add these options. Thank you so much for the suggestion. I would be more than happy to accommodate it soon!
Yes -- to the wings. The wrong wing has been fixed a little as that's also Vex but I realise I've wrote it confusing! Hopefully it's written clearer.
&& absolutely yes to Dragon. c:
Wow guys!! I'm happy I took the game off the main page right now just to go over all the tips and tidbits I received last night to make it a clean run through (really sad it got buggy again but I think I know how to fix it *hopefully* by tonight it's currently 8:46 am for me so i got time!)
I'm so overwhelemed and smiley people really like the writing mostly as that is what I try make GOOD. The coding I know will come to me in time as I go along.
&& I will also add extra customization I was asked about last night:) I can add customisation for /basically/ anything as long as I can get the grammar structure correct !
Loving it so far! Great writing, love the personalities of everyone we've met so far. Something about religious fiction tickles my fancy
I did run into a bug when picking a dorm room. "Chapter 1 line 1509. The indentation on this line includes whitespace that is neither a space or a tab. Delete the whitespace and replace it with spaces or tabs."
Thank you!
This is fixed. I think I've been using a command incorrectly, so I've replaced those in the file now and *fingers crossed* I got them all.
Still actively going through the small demo as these asks come in as well, so don't worry. I have a few hours to kill before adult-duties take place!
I havent posted on the forum yet until I know it's got a clean run through but there is a lot of code.
just started reading this and I'm enjoying it. but i do have a question. are we able to change our hair? bc if you hit changed hair it just takes me to this as the next page.
You focus first on your hair — the way it frames your face, the way it falls when you tilt your head. You fix it, and you swear your reflection waits a second before copying the movement.
Your eyes meet your own in the glass.
They look back with a stranger’s intensity. You lean forward and again the reflection takes a beat to copy. You're sure this time there's a delay. Your stomach drops as the mirror grins, your own expression almost copying it.
Infinite loading screen during the part where the dragon protects the protagonist.
Silly me, fixed the bug then I did not upload chapter one. That's it now I've been able to pass the Dragon. Let me know if you find any other bugs please. :) Also hair had a bug not showing, that is fixed too.
However I noticed that we can't change our hair during character creation, and we get an error popup upon confirming our appearance that says: "chapter1 line 388: The indentation on this line includes whitespace that is neither a space nor a tab. Delete the whitespace and replace it with spaces or tabs."
Regardless, thank you for sharing your work with us, the public; I look forward to reading more of it and seeing where this goes! :) Have a lovely day!
Hi and thank you so much for this ask!
I have just updated it. Let me know if this works. Line 388 of the wing colour customisation should be fixed. Fingers crossed there's no other bugs. I'm going to go through it actively right now to try find more. <3
I also have been told when trying to 'change hair' it doesn't let you. No idea why it's doing that so I /might/ have to retype the whole customisation section but I'm fine doing that if it's the only way to get it to work.
