keu_ketshap

Do something sometimes | she/her | English is hard | Kazakh | Right now screaming and fanning over tadc and Hermitcraft

[forrest13]

Happy pride month!!!🏳️‍🌈🏳️‍⚧️

[keuketshap]

Happy pride month!

[jamtamart]

life's tuff !!!

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Have finished a sketchbook recently, here is some pages

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07.05.2022 - 28.05.2026

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Some full pages

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Have finished a sketchbook recently, here is some pages

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07.05.2022 - 28.05.2026

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Have finished a sketchbook recently, here is some pages

[jamtamart]

Can we put a bow on Bdubs' tail like eeyore has

someone snuck it on him while he was sleeping and noone will admit who it was

[taxed-up-trotter]

40/61 - I feel like I'm back at square one again trying to transition from digital to traditional art my brain is not working 😭😭😔

[wafflewarrior111]

So... I found this and now it keeps coming to mind. You hear about "life-changing writing advice" all the time and usually its really not—but honestly this is it man.

I'm going to try it.

[missroserose]

I love the lawyer metaphor, because whenever I see “John knew that...” in prose writing I immediately think “how?  How does he know it?”  Interrogate your witnesses.  Cross-examine them.  Make them explain their reasoning.  It pays dividends.

[heck-in-a-handbasket]

All of this, but also feels/felt. My editor has forbidden me from using those and it’s forced me to stretch my skills.

[ineedthesons]

This is your "show not tell" advice explained!

[tarysande]

Editor here.

First, let me preface this with something very important: you can treat all of this advice as SECOND-DRAFT ADVICE. It is so much easier to rewrite this kind of stuff once you have words on the page. Telling yourself the first draft is totally appropriate and acceptable.

What we’re talking about here are FILTER WORDS (and to some degree verbs of being). Yes, “thought” words are included. But so are “heard, saw, looked, tasted, smelled” etc.—most words having to do with the senses.

This isn’t black and white advice; sometimes you’ll use these words and that’s okay. They’re not WRONG. They’re just weaker. And they’re weaker because they create distance between the reader and the experience of the character.*

If you want your reader to feel like they’re experiencing the story right alongside the character, you want to cut down on filter words.

*This is particularly important with first person and close third POVs. The reader always knows whose eyes they’re seeing through and thoughts they’re privy to. So you don’t need to tell them “I saw X.” Or “I heard X.” Or “I thought Y.” You can just jump into the action/observation as it’s happening.

This is also where you want to pay attention to verbs of being.

“It was rainy.” Versus: “The rain pounded against the roof.” Or “The rain howled like an injured animal.” Or “The rain tapped against the window like an anxious lover.” All of these are inviting the reader deeper into the experience of the story by using stronger verbs and similes. And, at the same time, they stir feelings (instead of TELLING feelings). And feelings keep your reader engaged. Engaged readers keep turning pages; engaged readers become FANS.

[the-haiku-bot]

This is also where

you want to pay attention

to verbs of being.

Beep boop! I look for accidental haiku posts. Sometimes I mess up.

[defilerwyrm]

The most valuable advice that Author Ex gave me through the years that we wrote together was this: the problem with all these filter words is that they create distance in the POV.

That means that when you read a line like

John saw that the curtains were open.

It immediately takes you OUT of the character's perspective and instead tells you what they experience as a secondhand observation.

You don't have to get fancy or purple with how you rephrase things like this. Not everything needs a ton of breathing room.

You wanna know what's perfectly impactful while keeping a tight POV?

The curtains were open.

Simple as that.

[keuketshap]

Drew two favourite guys together

(Cain wouldn't survive Etho's critiques)

[keuketshap]

He's just a little guy, look at him!

[keuketshap]

Don't know how I lived before without a brush pen

[keuketshap]

Me, choosing to live outside of the internet for the month to not get spoilers for the final of tadc:

[bellshazes]

in which wonderful & terrible things happen to etho's person, but he's not going to let that stop him from recording an episode. for some reason?

etho: something happened today guys, something wonderful just happened to me. let me tell you about it. so earlier today, i had to knock some snow off of a roof, right. and i was like "okay, what do i use? what do i use?" i didn't need to do much, just a little bit, so it's like, there's a broom next to me, that'll probably work. i picked it up, i shook it on the ground a couple times to knock the dirt out of it, you know? and sure enough, while looking up at what i was doing, there was no dirt falling out or anything but there was one giant piece of sawdust still in the broom - it fell out, went right in my eye. [laughs] and - you know sometimes, you get something in your eye and it's like, oh man i gotta get this thing out! but other times it's like, [whisper-screaming] "AAAAAH!!!" it hurts so bad, today it hurt so bad. i just like stopped what i was doing and ran inside, crying out of one eye. and after five minutes or so the piece of wood got so soggy from the tears it didn't hurt as bad anymore. i finally got it out, it's been like eight hours in my eye. i couldn't get it out as much as i tried before. so i'm feeling so much better i'm so happy, it's finally gone, it's left me! etho: in fact it's still usable, the mic and the speakers are fine, they just aren't being held together properly. and i was gonna try and fix it - but i put it on my head and when i took it off i saw it was leaking glue out of the seams for some reason? and i was like, i'm not putting that on my head anymore, so... etho, about the same headset several years later: i just broke my headset again. funny enough not where the superglue was, but in a brand new spot. i tried to fix it and i got superglue all over my fingers now. can't feel anything in my fingers. it's terrible. etho: i sat down too soon here in my leather chair. my back is just damp - still damp from the shower! and it's the worst sticky, nasty feeling ever! and I can't lean forward because then I'll be in the wrong position for the microphone, so I just have to deal with it, guys. my life is so hard.

[reading-writing-revolution]

[keuketshap]

Some past life doodles

(first one technically is not finished)

[weevmo]

how to feed your Caine AI in a few easy steps! (this is so stupid)

[keuketshap]

Hermits bases that I drew in attempt to become better at gouache

Also a doodle of Gem's bridge that was drawn at the beginning of the season