🧡NEED SOME SUGGESTIONS!!!💚
I was writing a new bkdk omegaverse fantasy au...and needed some suggestions to wether the opening works or not.
Long ago, when the blood moon hung low and heavy in the sky, a child was born.The forest was silent that night.
Even the wolves forgot how to howl.
They wrapped him in silver before he took his first breath.
Said his freckles were stars scattered by the gods.
Said his eyes held the stillness of a full moon over water.
He was called sacred. Revered, yet...
Promised to a foreign tribe before he ever learned to speak.
Raised behind veils, kept pure for peace.
They never end the way you hope.
There was another boy with fire in his bones—a warrior, who never bowed to ceremony.
He was not meant to see the veiled one, and yet, their hearts still beat for each other till eternity.
No one speaks their names now,
but every spring, the red carnations bloom along the water’s edge—
This might not be a story of a happily ever after.
But it is a story that made the moon weep.
And some nights… if you sit very still,
you can hear the laughter that never reached the altar...
How is this?? Would you read the story of this was the opening?? What feeling are you getting??
I am open to constructive criticism cuz this a 4 Am sleep deprived idea🥲
