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Adult

[sickesteveri]

Summary:

Noah wasn’t about to give up. “No Hattrick or girlfriend to celebrate with tonight?” he pressed, his earlier nervousness completely gone, and gone with it was the polite kid who waved shyly at Nagi five minutes ago. This guy was a menace. One second they were talking about football, and now he was being asked about his love life?

Or: Nagi wins the biggest trophy of his entire career and ends up flying across the world on his boyfriend's lap on the same night. He may or may not have come out to the entire world somewhere along the way.

Chapters: 2/2 Fandom: Blue Lock (Manga), Blue Lock (Anime) Rating: Mature Warnings: Creator Chose Not To Use Archive Warnings Relationships: Mikage Reo/Nagi Seishirou Additional Tags: Established Relationship, Long-Distance Relationship, Football | Soccer, real life clubs, Nagi Seishirou is Whipped, Twitter, Mikage Reo Falls in Love First but Nagi Seishirou Falls in Love Harder, Aged-Up Character(s), Post-Blue Lock, Nagi is too spoiled for his own good, Reo Mikage speaks five languages, Dirty Talk, in spanish lol, yes i do not speak spanish, Making Out, Sloppy style, Touch-Starved Nagi Seishirou, Nagi Seishirou is a Little Shit, First chapter is just Nagi thinking about Reo nonstop, Implied/Referenced Homophobia, Nagi Seishirou-centric 

(Yes, this is a reference to that one interview of haaland. If you know you know)

[wiadrorobakow]

cuties

[iphysalian]

How To Make Your Writing Less Stiff 6

Part 5

Part 1

Adverbs

Gasp! Oh no. Dare come yet more writing advice burning adverbs at the stake? Vindictively, gleefully, manically dancing in the ashes?

No.

This is not about whether or not you should use them, but their frequency and obvious places to replace them. Most bad adverbs are the common ones that could be replaced by verbs we all know.

“She ran quickly” // “She sprinted”

“He said angrily” // “He snapped” “He chided” “He chastised”

vs.

“He ate voraciously”

“She swayed solemnly”

“She laughed sadly”

Bonus if you can add in some alliteration like ‘swayed solemnly’

If you can come up with an obvious verb to replace your verb + adverb combo, do so. If it would take more words or the closest applicable verb doesn’t hit the same vibe, then leave it. Adverbs should enhance the verb, not be redundant. Verbs shouldn’t be pretentious just to avoid them.

“She smiled happily” — most smiles are happy. Happily is redundant.

“He ran quickly” —a run is, by nature, quick

vs.

“She smiled sourly”

“He ran erratically”

Also!

The adverb need not always be after the verb.

“C accepted gladly” // “C gladly accepted”

But also

“Glad, C accepted”

“A shook their head resolutely” // “Resolute, A shook their head”

“The child skipped excitedly away.” // “Excited, the child skipped away.” // “The child skipped away, excited.”

English is flexible like that.

Which is what I mean with managing your adverb frequency. As most end in the -ly, too many in succession, on top of the repeat syntax of Subject - Verb - Adverb looks boring and dull (and so does beginning every sentence with the subject). It helps with your cadence and flow if you don’t have entire paragraphs at a time all starting with “He [verb]” or “She [verb]” or “They [verb].” We don't speak like this in natural conversation.

But at the end of the day, there are some juicy adverbs that have no equal without busting out the thesaurus for some obscure lexical nugget that no one would understand anyway.

[narimikko]

Wip again