salty & sad: k0a prologue bit? (pg 1-6)
WARNING: K0A SPOILERS PGS 1-6
Ok. So. Here we go. The final book in the t0g series. why am i doing this to myself. i am going to be very salty and VERY petty so im sorry (not really) rip also im doing this with HTML so it this is computing revision
‘He barely remembered his own name. And only recalled it because his companions spoke it while they searched for her…’
*unintelligible screeching* F*UCK OFF F*CK RIGHT OFF!!! ITS THE THIRD LINE AND MY BS METER IS BROKEN!!!! HELP!!! also why was the full stop needed?? B*tch even i know u should never start a sentence with and. A comma could’ve achieved the same effect without fragmenting sentences.
’And after he was done with [M/aeve], after that, then he’d take on the cold-blooded gods themselves, hell-bent on destroying what might remain of his mate.’
I don’t know if this is just me being a dumb b*tch, but the way this is worded it kinda sounds like R/owan is hell-bent on destroying alien…….. but anyways……. (Also s/jm started another sentence with ‘and’!!!! I don’t know if i will be able to take more of this f*ckery!!!!!!!)
So, i finished the R/owan bit (it was like a page and a third at most) and that was just a load of pompous bullsh*t w/ s/jm trying to be all ~dramatic~ and,,,,, it was just a bit,,,,, bad.
’As she would likely be forgotten.’
oh come on. Stfu. You’re never going to be forgotten!!! you have like 27 titles!!!!! if anything they’ll remember you as that Mary Sue who was a twat.
Whoops, there it is
the first em dash has appeared (— one of these funky men) on pg no. 4. I think im going to keep a running tally of the number of em dashes used.
’A princess who was to live for a thousand years. Longer.’
what do you mean!!??? WHAT DO YOU MEAN!!!! WHY WAS THIS PHRASED THIS WAY WTF!!!!!! I THINK SOMEONE NEEDS TO TELL S/JM THAT NOT EVERY SENTENCE HAS TO BE A FRAGMENT!!!!! ugh. I’m going to need a calming cup of chamomile tea after this.
Damn. Ok. I finished the prologue bit and my thoughts are: WHY ARE THE SENTENCES SO SHORT!!!! IT JUST MAKES THE PROSE DIFFICULT TO READ AND IT STOPS IT FROM FLOWING!!! That prologue (?) was just a bit weird. Like s/jm was obviously trying to do something and make it enticing but it didn’t really do the trick. It was basically r/owan going: help!! What’s my name!! Idk but i want my mate!!! And alien going: f*ck the gods they don’t like me and im being tortured but wait r/owan is still my prince and i miss his smell and the smell of my kingdom!!
Hhhhh anyways i hope yall enjoyed my suffering and i hope it was entertaining uwu!! If u have any advice for me on how to make my reviews better, feel free to comment or dm me!!
em-dash count: 3