Anyone got any second opinions on my color palette for that smpsona picrew? (That includes for the unnatural/ghostsona/mobsona colors.) I'll probably adjust them as I go if when I add in the blush or freckle options the saturation seems wrong, but I want to get this as close as I can before I start adding in all the color options!
Back pressed against the exterior wall of the tenement sphere, Magatha squeezed her eyes shut and tried to breathe. She gripped the catwalk railing with one hand, her fist so tight that the bones o…
Hey Writeblrs! (ConCrit Request)
Hi, all! I’ve started working on the novella expansion of my short story, The Color of Magpies. Some of you may have seen the crosspost for this chapter last week or so--I’ve made a couple changes based on an IRL writing group I attend. However, the people in my group have a bit of pre-existing knowledge about the story, so I’m trying to get some fresh eyes on it to see how well the scene fires. If you have the time, I’d really appreciate some feedback. It doesn’t have to be anything extensive. An answer to any of these questions would be great!
What kind of story do you think I am promising you? What story would you expect to follow this opening?
How do you feel about Magatha as a main character? Would you be interested in reading a whole story from her perspective?
Were you ever confused or bored? If so, where?
Is there anything you thought was really cool and would like to see more of?
You can post your answers wherever--on the WordPress post, on this post, in a message, wherever you feel most comfortable! Thanks!
guess i'll be the first to ask? lol, admin Maggie quiere recibir informacion para mejorar mi idea! <3
"i was thinking of doing humanstuck and it being like, Tav's gotten high a few times before but it wasn't that great 'cause of the people he was with or whatever and it had kinda scared him straight. But, then Gamzee asks him and he's like, 'idk...' and then some shix goes down in tav's life and he ends up at gamzee's apartment or whatever one day when gamzee's lighting up and he's just like, 'fuq it. i don't even care.' then enter happy!high shenanigans? idek"
direct copy/pasta between brambie and me.
suggestions for tweeking/help with how to characterize it? Y'all think 1st person would be best too; make it more personal and head examine-y?