I think we’ve all established that I’m bad at intros at this point, but I’m also flying blind here because I haven’t even skimmed this chapter before starting this review.
This should be interesting.
3rd Person's POV
Allen walked back into the room. "Oliver stop getting all touchy feely. You're gonna make me barf!" Allen said pretend gagging. Oliver gave a slight glare to him and stood up. "Allen be nice! She is our permanent guest!" Oliver said. Permanent!? I started to cry again.
This is not third person.
This is FIRST PERSON.
"Now you've upset her!" Oliver said flicking Allen's nose. Luciano walked into the room "You two are stupider than my allies."
Kuro and Lutz?
I dunno, their intelligence hasn’t been expressed outright, so I don’t know if I can agree or disagree.
he said with a disgusted look on his face. He then spotted me. "Well looks like the ragazza is awake." he purred. I started to tremble as he walked up to me. He put his hand under my chin and make me look him in the eyes. He got too close to my face for my liking.
Flavio pulled him back. "Hello bestie!" Flavio said. "You're going to be my new model! Aren't you glad!?" Flavio said full of pep.
Um, it’s better than getting murdered, I suppose.
He pulled me up and ran out of the room with me. This was definitely 2p! Romano alright. He took me to a room full of papers with designs on them. There were also fabrics everywhere.
"I have been dying to have the perfect model! Now here you are!" Flavio said getting a bunch of outfits. I stood there quietly not knowing what what was going to happen. Flavio pulled out a couple of dresses.
"Now go out these on!" he said pushing me to a changing room. I put on the first dress which was red, strapless, and reached my ankles. I walked back out and Flavio jumped up and down with joy. "Prefect!"
I uh... I guess this is just my life now.
he said handing me another dress and shoving me back in. This one was a dress that reached my knees. It had ruffles that were multicolored. It had spaghetti straps. "Even better!" Flavio said happily." he handed me another dress and shoved me into the room again.
Fact about me, I actually adore wearing dresses. They make me feel pretty.
I looked at the dress and grimaced. It was a maid dress that ended above the knee. It was the kind that had puffy short sleeves. I put it on blushing. I felt like an actual doll. "Too cute!" Flavio chirped.
Wow, I hate that.
With a giant blush I was standing in poses while he took pictures. The other 2p!s busted through the door. I was blushing deeply. A blush crept up on Oliver as he saw what I was wearing.
"What the hell is going on here!?" Allen said. "I was having a little fashion show with dear {Kat} here!" Flavio said.
Unwittingly. You didn’t really give me a say. But when getting murdered is my other option, I think this is the lesser of two evils.
Luciano walked up his brother, smacked his head, then yelled at him in Italian. Lutz smirked "That's what I'm talking about." Lutz said while looking at me. Kuro went behind me when I wasn't looking.
?????
"This is perfect material for my manga." he said. I ran into the changing room and locked the door behind me.
That... just lowkey sounds like something regular Japan would say.
I got dressed back into the clothes I woke up in. Suddenly I spotted something. A window!
There’s a window in the changing room?
I ran towards it. It was high up but it was big enough for me to crawl through. I stacked a bunch of boxes and hoped it was enough to get me up there. I started to climb when there were bangs on the door. I had to hurry. I almost made it out the window when I heard the door shatter.
It shattered?
Someone just
shattered the door?
Okay sure.
I fell out the window. I hit the ground kind of hard but I didn't care. I knew I had to run. I sprinted through the yard. I knew if I tripped like in a horror movie they would catch me. I ran until I found a gate. Just my luck. It was way taller than me.
Then open it like a normal person.
Or climb it if you can’t, it can’t be that hard. I’ve climbed over fences taller than me.
I looked behind me and saw the 2p!s running after me. I did my best to try to climb the gate. I made it to the top but the 2p!s were close. I jumped down and hurt my ankle. I still ran as fast as I could. I could hear them yelling about not having the key.
They just have a gate at their house that nobody has a key to?
What, do they just pole vault over it when they need to get past it?
I knew that it wouldn't stop them for long. I had to partially limp. I think my ankle is sprained.
No. You can’t walk or stand with a sprained ankle, let alone run. I know from experience.
I kept running.
No you didn’t.
I looked behind me to see if they were still following me when I bumped into something. I fell back and landed on my butt. I looked up to see what I hit. I smiled hopefully when I saw Ludwig.
Isn’t that convenient?
My adrenaline left and I was left feeling tired and the pain of my sprained ankle. I passed out.
Mkay, you had literally no reason to pass out, and sprained ankles don’t hurt so much that you pass out unless it’s really serious, and you jumped off the top of a gate.
Give me a break.
I’ll see you guys later, I think I’ll review the next chapter now.
