#critique plz

[sgtbutterben]

How do I make his feathers look like feathers cause rn the just look like weird scales

[fujikis]

Anyway, I'm gonna try a different edit style!

[chocolateotaku13]

Hey you guys should critique this work-in-progress story! Please?

Life is only a game. You lie and make up your own stories in order to make yourself feel involved in whatever it is you're doing. You try to make yourself feel better, feel liked. After a while, the story sticks, and it's too late to go back. Even if it can't be father from the truth. Somehow, people find themselves believing the unbelievable stories. With that little lie, you can throw yourself into your own new world. You think about how it would have been without that lie, and you struggle at times to keep up with it. You may even forget a detail or two, while others remember. They will notice if you change the story, and some trust will be lost. Eventually, everyone will disappear from your life because of that lie. That innocent white lie that altered your very mind and soul. And before you know it, it's all over. Years of stressing and lies disintegrate from your consciousness. You fall into an eternal slumber, and secretly watch everyone who once trusted you and cared about the things you said. They will eventually forget, you think. Too bad they won't. Your body gone, soul left behind, all that's left to be done if grieve got the rest of eternity, until even your souls has disappeared, as if you had never existed. All because of one, little, lie. Do you wake up? Believe it was all a dream? Or do you stay trapped in your mind forever? After all, Life is only a game, played by a flaky god. They decide it all in the end. ~end!~