#dfy11

[jeonstudios]

i love how u show dfy’s jk struggling with his transition from siren to human. a lot of writers typically treat the whole transition as a happy, positive thing without ever mentioning the stress/regret involved in adjusting to such a drastic change. love how u did that! such a realistic reaction.

THANK YOU omg this makes me so happy!! realism is all i’ve ever wanted (sorta at least)

[jeonstudios]

Hi lovely! I really enjoyed part 11 and I felt so many emotions :O I really don't want this to sound pushy or aggressive or anything, but do you know when you will post the last part? I was just wondering but pLEASE TAKE YOUR TIME! I am just a curious gal and I don't want to pressure you to post asap!

hello!! i’m glad you liked it!! i’m doing the final editing and double-checking to make sure i didn’t forget anything, so like... literally any moment lol. today-tomorrow? 

[jeonstudios]

omg I don't think you're dragging out DFY at all! The pacing is really good, not rushed or too slow imo. Looking forward to the final part ^-^

thank you! my biggest fear is to take a fic that people actually really enjoy and give it a lousy ending... :/ so thank you!! <3

[jeonstudios]

I think you did well at splitting the chapters up and ended at a good point- anything that doesn’t make sense now will align in the next part anyway! Also, the smut made me appreciate the lost art of handjobs (they don’t get enough credit anymore)and I think you’ve done a great job of showing the dynamic of their relationship as they navigate so much trauma and change together while still trying to love each other in a healthy way. Tis beautiful :’)

thank you so much!! yeah i always aim to end the chapters at cliffhangers (more or less) and since the next part will be the last, then hopefully everything will be tied together... also the lost art of handjobs lmao!! but i agree!! i wanted the first time they did something to be intimate and what better way than face to face (well, face to face and face close to face lol)

 i was a little nervous at the other anon (if you’re reading this, don’t feel bad for telling me your thoughts, i don’t expect everyone to always know my intentions, especially when i could’ve wanted that outcome just as much) because although they have problems of their own-both of them-their love is healthy. it’s more like whatever problems they have, and the circumstances, affect the relationship... they haven’t been together romantically for very long after all and they need to figure things out. so thank you for telling me, that was more what i was going for!! <3

[jeonstudios]

DFY PART 11 IS SO GOOD!!! IT MADE ME SO SOFT BUT THEN I WAS SO SAD AT THE END i just want them to be happy :-( and have lil baby children who love the water :-( and just live a happy life :-( but nonetheless your writing is impeccable and i can’t wait to read the last part :)

“baby children” i- thank you!! i’m having a hard time liking it myself, i just feel like maybe i should’ve ended it sooner, after he got legs and all... i feel like i’m just dragging it out and that it’s not good anymore *sigh* but thank you for liking it!! also i like that your sad smileys have noses but not the happy ones

[jeonstudios]

Chp 11 was interesting. I got the impression that their relationship was much less healthy than I originally thought (not a criticism, it feels almost fitting). MC is obsessively infatuated, gushing 'I love you's nonstop, whilst JK is deeply insecure and depends on her attention and validation. He only said it back like once, after the bj. I didnt expect JK to get angry over the scales. What a twist! I could be wrong about everything but these are my initial thoughts.

your thoughts are honestly more interesting than the chapter lmao. i didn’t really want to split it up into two parts but it got too long and i had to, but if i hadn’t, i’m very sure your thoughts had been different. i can never discuss anything without writing super much but oh well lol. here’s my take on it in case anyone else is confused because while your thoughts could definitely be ‘right,’ (idk how to explain it i’m tired lmao) it’s not what i had in mind or really want it to look like.

i don’t see her as obsessively infatuated at all, i see her as in love and doing the most she can to help jk. she went so long without even being able to admit to herself that she liked him because it would be ‘wrong’. at part 8/9 she told him that she loved him the first time, and it was because she felt like he needed to hear it, he was having some sort of break down and she just wanted to help. earlier that day, when she asked him to move in with her, she accepted his ‘no,’ and offered the apartment if he wanted to live there with someone else. everything she does, she does because she loves him and wants him to be happy, especially since his life has been so hard. he said that he regretted the procedure and she got really worried. i think i’d say that her focus lies more with wanting him to know that he is loved than that she loves him if you get what i’m saying. and she also tells him that she loves him because she knows that she was so close to losing him, and having anything unsaid would break her.

in this chapter she does look a little obsessed but it’s more with the scales, i’d say. he left really abruptly and it traumatized her (she didn’t get to say goodbye like she planned, she would never know what happened to him and she knew he’d be alone, she blamed herself for it as well) and the only thing she had to remember him by and keep her sane (she’d known a siren after all) was the scales. she feels like he might leave again and she just wants to make sure she’d get through that as well. not only were they a reminder of him, but also of that time of her life that she’d thought she left behind when he left.

jk is insecure, he’s always sorta been, even though he isn’t really by nature. for a very long time, he’s lived under extreme circumstances. at the lab he was just wary of humans in general since they’d done him really no good, like, ever. but when he’s ‘human,’ he’s undergone huge, risky surgeries and everything is new to him and he has so many emotions, and in a certain way, he doesn’t want to be too much because if he doesn’t have reader and the others, then he really has no one to help him. that’s all beside the fact that he loves her just as much as she loves him, she’s just saying it a lot more to help him focus on positive things while he’s going through so much, and because he just isn’t that ‘wordy’ lmao. he’s come a long way and it’s easy to forget that he wasn’t even used to talking before reader showed up at the tank. he isn’t as good at expressing himself, it isn’t really stated, but he just sorta assumes that she knows how much he loves her. 

when it comes to the attention and validation, yes, he wants it, he really does. he’s never been loved or cared for like that before, and to him it’s addicting, and since she’s happy to give it to him, it just always happens. but again, i’d say it’s more because he loves her and wants to be close to her rather than feeling that his insecurity demands it. 

this was super long and i don’t want you to feel like i ‘corrected’ you in any way lmao, we all work differently and see things differently. i tend to sometimes miss things because for some reason i think y’all live in my head and see everything the way i do lol i really appreciate your thoughts and they are completely valid, you obviously could interpret the story like that even though that’s not really what i wanted. i really look forward to hearing your reaction from the last part!! 

[jeonstudios]

Me at MermanJk: hun. Do you want YN to cut your toe nails and put them in a little box too? It’s like scrapbooking. Look YN has a hoarding thing look how many boxes she has. Be patient you brat.

Anonymous said:

Forgot to add. Your smut? Amazing. It feel soft. Intimate. Loving. I wish. I only wish. You made me wishful. So you did succeed. The nails clippings is a joke I’m sorry if it could be read as a critique but I just thought about it and found it funny that the solution could be YN making Jk sit on the bathroom and collect his toenail clippings and putting them on like a trophy case. It’s dumb. And hilarious.

honestly... what? i just don’t really understand? he wasn’t mad that she kept the scales, he was upset because she appeared to get angry at him for accidentally destroying some of them... and they meant so much to her because she thinks he’ll be gone one day and she wants to have that reminder of him? he left them for her before he left and she clung to them because she didn’t really have anything else to remember him by... i don’t really get where the brat part comes from either, sure he might’ve overreacted a little, but i’d say his feelings were valid, and you’ll definitely see why in the next part. thank you for liking the smut though!!