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[aurumskyy]

And the match v relationship symbolism absolutely vibes IDK if im reading way to much into it but like you start and the match is pristine (first appearances) and then it becomes blackened but there's still the flame there (truths come out but there's still love), then its buffeted by the wind but refuses to die (struggles), then you get too close to the flame and it hurts (fight?) and finally the flame is out but the embers are still there (longing??? Pining??). +

no, you’re not reading too much into it!! what you said ^^ is exactly what i intended!! y/n and akaashi start their relationship well (a pristine match) which deteriorates into some tense love, and then when it’s snuffed out, that’s a really low point in their relationship. and the embers are definitely pining/lingering love. i’m actually really into your interpretation 🤩🤩-

[aurumskyy]

"and he grants you a smile you’ve rarely seen; unique like warm rain and the smell of a vineyard." stop dude I'm... like. Rain you could dance in forever without ramifications. Walking through the vines, mountains all around, a light breeze, utter peace. DUDE YOUR WRITING IS SO EMOTIVE ITS THE MIDDLE OF WINTER AND IM IMAGINING A FRESH SPRING SCENE ITS JUST THST POWERFUL. wow 😍 I'm so exited for the other parts oOF

yesss!! ugh your feedback fuels my content- (but thank you! <3)

spring is such a nice season to write about?? because:

flowers; smells; muddy water (there’s gotta be some way to make that appealing); breezes that chill you in a refreshing way??

i don’t know- it’s just so fun to write about!!

[aurumskyy]

+ DUDEEEEE the symbolism absolutely makes sense and I'm so excited for this but also so so stressed oh no imma cry huh? anyway thank u for indulging my rambles, sorry this is so long 💕💕

AHAH I’M VERY GLAD-

i was super scared that the symbolism wouldn’t work-

y/n getting burned is a way of indicating where they get hurt in the relationship, either by pushing too much or getting too close and not being prepared for the nuances of the other person.

AND YES-

i plan for bwb to be very angsty- it depicts them getting worse consistently and the flaws between them :((

but i really appreciate your comments!! and i’d love to hear more of them whenever you want to drop them in my ask box! thank you! <3

[aurumskyy]

"The sounds of nature are the accompaniment to your romance." plz. oof. the atmosphere is so strong in this whole thing like stripping it right back to just the bare senses... This whole thing was an absolute joy to read. "some dalliance of unease" no thoughts, I'm just a huge fan of this phrasing. Dalliance is... Great word choice. Yes. Big fan.

word choice woot woot! 🎉 

one of my biggest writing goals is to make my content...”sensory”?? if that makes sense. 

i go through a “5 senses” checklist?? from touch to smell and the like, i try to incorporate that in there...somehow (whether it works is up to debate AHAH-)

but thank you so much! (i enjoy getting these so much!)

[aurumskyy]

"The sun smiles down on the water. Flecks of light scatter off the surface. Foaming slightly, the liquid splashes as it meets lichen-covered rocks; dusting your face in chilled, pellucid freckles." u should know it's 5°C where I am rn. It's freezing. But this was such a potent mental image I could feel the warmth. I was /there/. Like I could feel the sparkle and glare of sun on the water, the cool stream, the spongy moss. In my brain theres mountains, a rolling field, big willow trees... *sigh*

WOO- 

YOUR ASKS ARE GREAT-

aaaww- i’m touched, and i’m really glad that imagery came across to you! passeggiata was written with very nature-y vibes in mind :), so your interpretation is spot on! 

[aurumskyy]

"and the heart of the match glows a resilient red. For an infinitesimal second, it reignites- the flame reaching higher, grasping at the air defiantly" THIS AJHHH. again, vocab is on point. "infinitesimal"??? dude... I'm shook such a good choice. And the "defiance" of the flame is such a cool image.

"infinitesimal" is a great word!! it makes the thing it describes seem so insignificant yet it makes you take notice at the same time. 

i believe that good vocab doesn’t necessarily mean complicated words, but accurately connotated ones? variety and rarer words are AMAZING, and i love them- but there’s something about the difference between:

“it was chilly” and “it was frigid” (even though both are syn. for cold) which makes connotation very poignant. 

(another example is “she said” and “she growled”)

(but again aha thank you so much!! i’m so glad you liked it!)

[aurumskyy]

"Still, it returns to blaze quietly; a small show of force despite the breeze that whisps by" I was waiting for it and it DELIVERED your descriptions for the wind were lovely too? idk if thats weird but they stood out to me. "Then- it singes. Pain shoots up your palm, and you curse- switching the matchstick to the other hand with panic" OOF yes the burn was also super cool I though using the short sentence was clever! Makes it a bit more frantic, and the "fulfilling warmth" phrasing was gorgeous

AW THIS IS SO SWEET-

i used the word “whisps” because the flame was “strong” in that moment- so i tried to describe the wind using more “light” words that depicted fragility. that’s why its a “breeze” after the flame resists but a “gust” before. it’s also why i used “blaze” for the fire!! (since i feel it connotates some sort of strength :) 

it’s hard for me to write pain/anger scenes, but i like using curt sentences for that?? i feel like it’s very...rapier-like- some sort of “one stab of writing angst and done.”

the "fulfilling warmth" phrasing was something i liked writing aha- thank you so much for your compliments!

[aurumskyy]

"It sways, waving to you- almost fluttering out to touch you, and you can see the undulation of its radiant figure against the grey wall." im doing a lot of excited arm movements rn cuz I AHHHH I JUST LOVE THIS BIT OK?? 'undulation' was suxh a huge brain choice and the atmosphere really comes alive with the red of the flames v the grey of the wall?? Juxtaposition babey I love it oof many feelings.

AHAH YES EXCITED ARM MOVEMENTS- :))

Undulation kinda reminds me of water but?? i felt the fire had to be fluid and i wanted some sort of serene tone before she got burned!! 

aha juxtaposition YES! i was thinking of using the wall to represent akaashi in the relationship- staid. y/n would be the flame- bright but possibly harmful. 

(this prologue was the culmination of my symbolic DREAMS)