Monday of Appreciation: Part 84
Hello everyone, Smite here!
I'm really sorry, I wanted to read 6 or more stories this week, but my health has been pretty bad the last couple of days and I have been quite busy. I couldn't even visit a doctor, which I should definitely do soon. I hope you're all good and healthy and taking care of yourselves.
Let's get to the fics, shall we?
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@rvp32: The Secret Life of Yooa ft. Yooa, Irene
You asked for feedback on this, so lemme give you two quick "fixes" for your otherwise very creative, fun fic:
Change the first part, you know, the one that isn't part of the fic to look different than the rest of the fic-text. I was very confused at first lmao, maybe you could change the font, make some sort of barrier, include more info about the fic (length, kinks, etc)
You tend to repeat yourself quite often in your descriptions. Try to change things up, make them engaging: What is the reader feeling? What do they smell and see? Try to use something other than "You are... You do...", mix up the beginning and the verb.
Really liked it, you got the talent!
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@maemisnippets: Be Care-full with her ft. Mashiro
BEST GIRL BEST GIRL BEST GIRL, for real she is so adorable and pretty and BEST GIRL she has to be in my life and take me to bed and heal my heart awwwww
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@sinswithpleasure: Parental Guidance ft. Taeyeon, Winter (TW)


















