Whitt Roberts and the importance of cause and effect
I ranted about Leviathan Chronicles before. However, like the idiot I am, I've continued to listen to the radiodrama. And one series of events basically stood out as a great example of how to not write reactions to a character's actions.
Whitt Roberts is an ultra secret spy working for a group even beyond Black OPs. He has just fallen from a burning blimp, and survived. His ear also has been sliced cleanly off. He calls for a super secret medical organization ambulance to take him to a very super secret facility for all criminals and agents who can pay for it. Generally, the rule there is to not start shit, because it is neutral ground where people get treated safely.
Well, Whitt comes from surgery, still missing an ear. Then, due to plot reasons, he decides to break the cardinal rule of the hospital and outright kills a nurse.
I should note here, that Whitt's actions themselves aren't the problem. A character should be allowed to act stupid and foolish in writing.
It is how the setting reacts to him. Instead of Whitt being drugged to all hell to avoid him running about just after surgery, he is as clear-minded as he can be. And despite the place being secret and highly funded, this one guy post-sugery is managing to defeat most of the security. Also, given the nature of the hospital, the fact that there are no protocols to deal with a paranoid and delirious patient, is strange.
It doesn't help that the person responsible for cutting off his ear and in the company of another super secret spy from the same organization Whitt belongs to, -is- there. And is the only person able to deal with the spy, despite the hospital being constantly toted as a super secret and super safe place for criminals and spies to stay at while injured and that the (female) spy he is with is also a badass.
The plot then manages to force these three to work together, despite the podcast spending episode after episode showing why that would be pretty impossible beforehand. It seems that the writer liked Whitt so much as a character, that he wanted to use him more. Thus this contrived mess of a plot.
The huge issue of showing vs telling is obvious here. No matter how you explain something away, if you don't show it being so, we believe what we see (or hear, in this case). The push for Whitt to ally with the two other characters is also just plain groan worthy. Uneasy allies are one thing, but there is no actual reason for these characters to ally nor want.
Whitt here might actually be the best example of what a Mary Sue character is to me, a character that the universe bends backwards for to survive and succeed to showcase how badass they are. Instead, it just seems they are given everything on a gold platter. Whitt is challenged, but he isn't actually tested by these challenges in any meaningful way.
The podcast is long dead, but I hope this little rant at least was interesting.