Hi there, Guppy! Could we have your opinion of our RPG? We've been open for nearly a month and don't seem to be catching on. Thank you in advance! - D
Good afternoon! I’d love to give you an opinion and see what I can help out with. Remember, that this is just my opinion - nothing is end all be all. I’m just being honest, and don’t intentionally mean to offend or hurt anyone. The url nor the icon give me a great idea of what the plot will be. I think that it will have something to do with a city, however I’m not sure. Then, the main page, while very lovely theme-wise, also doesn’t give me a great idea of what the rp will be. I think changing the header graphic could go a really long way. If you had something more than a city that gave a better picture, pun not intended, of what the rp is supposed to be. also, possibly adding some color to the theme itself (a solid color as the background, possibly gray, light blue, etc. would bring out the theme a bit more. I noticed that your most wanted space is empty, which I think you should consider filling with some fcs to make use of that space. I also think you could take out the archive link from the topbar, because I don’t think it would be necessary for muns to search through your archive. I like the theme you picked, though. Let’s see about your navigation. For me, I always prefer when a navigation is in order of before and after acceptance/applying. So, your navigation was a little confusing to me. The “help” section of the navigation seems completely unnecessary, it could be added to a user checklist after they’re done with applying. Also, I didn’t even see a link to a plot or rules link in the navigation page (not the sidebar on your main page), which is really important to have in the navigation! I would also move the gossip blog link off of the topbar as well, or give it another link so it is not mistaken as a link to the plot or other pages. I do think the theme you picked for you navigation is actually really interesting and nice.
Now, I’ll read the plot, which left me a little confused. I’m not in the Marvel fandom, so that might be part of the reason. I think that the crossover of Disney and Marvel characters is unique, but it feels a little over complicated and I don’t quite see where the Disney descendant characters come in. I think that it should be made clearer how the Disney (animated) characters are actually in New York and how they connect to the specific Marvel organizations? I just think that there is a lot thrown at the reader in the plot with little to no explanation of how the two worlds really came together and what exactly they’re fighting against. The Disney villains? HYDRA? Your characters are something else I would suggest having a masterlist of on the main (not just their fcs, or the link that goes to the intel blog). In the masterlist, I’d suggest having links to their bios so that players won’t have to go searching for the character they might want. After reading through a bio, I think that they’re very interesting and you give a lot of variation in character, but I’d like to know more stats on each character. How old they are, which side they’re on, who their parents are (included in the bio). I also was a little confused by what each piece of information on the character graphic means? What/where is Lennox Hill, why might they be a botanist or a computer engineer. Simple additions to the biography format would also go along way in clearing up a lot of confusion. I will also talk about your rules, which I think you should separate things like incest, NSFW, etc. into a separate triggers page. Also, “calling ‘dibs’” should maybe be renamed to “no reserving characters”. Otherwise, your rules are pretty average and make sense.
Your application interacts a lot more with the muns, but I think that you should stay away from asking your players the exact days they can play! Their schedule is something they could naturally add to their activity blurb if needed. Everything else on the application is pretty standard.
Here are just a few sidenotes I’ll point out... The updates link on the navigation goes to a page, instead of a tag, so you might want to fix that. I think having your app count as a tag not a page is also a little confusing and might be something you review. Overall, I personally wouldn’t apply due to my lack of knowledge on the material it’s based off of, but it also might be material that is confusing to both Marvel and Disney fans. I would do a slight rewrite of your plot to make it more clear about what exactly the offspring are fighting, how the Disney/Marvel universes collided, and a bit more detail on exactly how the roleplay will play out. Will you be doing plot drops? Would you add more characters as the rp continues? I think if you fixed some simple organization and informational pieces it would change up the rp a lot! Good luck.
