orginalpaperwaster replied to your post “orginalpaperwaster answered: Yes I would. Whenever you are ready ...”
I like it a lot, there are only a couple of things I would do to tweak it a little. Having been an editor there are a couple of little grammatical things I would fix, but no biggies. I would like a clearer idea of where we are in the pre-show cont.
timeline. How old are Sam/Dean? Also when you flash back there needs to be more of a space so that it’s clearer that’s what’s happening. A double space or asterisks should do it. Like the story though. Keep going. Hope this helps.
It does help - thank you for your input, I greatly appreciate it! Yeah, I haven't really gone through it to edit much, so this is really a first draft. I'll have a closer look at the grammar and stuff when I'm editing it :)
In the second chapter, Sam hides some college prospectuses he's been looking at, so the implication is that he's in his last year of High School. Not to spoil the story or anything, but it's kind of a What-Pushed-Sam-Over-The-Edge-To-Leave-For-Stanford story, so it will definitely become more obvious as the story goes on.
The summary for the story would be something like 'Sam has been toying with the idea of going to College for a long time, but when he gets hurt as a case goes south, he realises that getting out might be the only way he can be safe.' or something, so it will be apparent from the start once I've got the finished story up online that it's not long before he leaves for Stanford.
Thanks again for your help!
