#plot changes

[zbeez-outlet]

The NATLA is removing the Day of Black Sun Invasion and I’ll tell you why:

Where’s Haru?

Disregarding the disservice to Katara’s character by removing “Imprisoned”, there’s a pretty important gap that Haru, his father, and their people fill in the show.

They make up about half of the invasion force foot soldiers and operate the centipede-like tanks that are powered by earth bending. Their involvement is vital for the invasion arc and for future diplomatic purposes because for the first time in a century, the different nations are working together.

The Swamp

They are definitely taking out “The Swamp” from season 2, there’s no reason to repeat Sokka and Katara seeing their worst memories or other visions when they already do that in the Spirit World with Aang in season 1.

Not going to the swamp means they won’t become allies with the plant water benders, so less benders to operate the submarines.

So that’s two major allies likely removed from the show and cutting the invasion forces in half. No earth benders for tanks or the front lines and no extra water benders for the submarines or Huu for the giant vine monster assist.

Sokka’s relationship with Hakoda

First, HAKODA WOULD NEVER

It really makes me so mad what they changed with Hakoda. Sokka wasn’t left behind because he wasn’t skilled or talented or trusted, it was because he was just 13 and needed to take care of Katara.

Hakoda and Sokka’s relationship is built on trust, mutual admiration, similar tactical mindsets, and familial strength. They gave Sokka daddy issues he didn’t even have by failing his ice dodging test (which he passes with flying colors in the original), but I’m not getting into that.

The problem here is they set up no groundwork for Hakoda to trust Sokka to actually take over the invasion, if it happens, which is unlikely at this point.

Wan Shi Tong in the Spirit World and the Library

This is the big one, I’m convinced they’re removing Wan Shi Tong’s Library for a few reasons.

One, Zhao didn’t get his information about Tui and La from the library. He got it from the Fire Nation archives, which doesn’t really make sense. Why would they have information on Water Tribe history or legends? But whatever, this means he never went to the library and never burned the information on the Fire Nation.

Two, the sun dial that Sokka uses in the library to discover the solar eclipse that temporarily negates Fire bending is now in the Fire Nation. We see Ozai looking at it to determine the placement of Sozin’s comet at the end of the season 1. How is Sokka going to figure out the eclipse when the team isn’t even supposed to be in the Fire Nation at all in season 2?

Three, the library can only exist in the physical world if Wan Shi Tong is also in the physical world because he keeps it tethered there physically. That was his sacrifice to share his knowledge, he couldn’t return to the spirit world. Now, they’ll probably change the lore to make up for this like they have so unnecessarily with other things, but it all feels very messy and unplanned.

So, without the library, what else changes? Appa’s kidnapping, they won’t have time for it. This causes other issues, but I’m going to stick specifically to what it has to do with the invasion.

Protecting Appa is the reason the Kyoshi Worriers get captured by Azula, Suki ends up in the Boiling Rock prison, and Azula and co. get the disguises they need to infiltrate Ba Sing Se. Being undercover is how Azula finds out about the invasion and was able to warn Ozai so it was unsuccessful.

Are there narrative workarounds here? Probably, but not in a way that works with their limitations that I can see.

Pacing of the Show

They have no time to actually do the invasion.

Assuming they fix everything I mentioned above either in season 2 or off screen, their pacing is way too rushed to be able to reasonably fit in the invasion and the final battle.

Each season will be 8 episodes because that’s the Netflix formula, I highly doubt they’ll change it. It makes zero sense to do a massive battle halfway through season 3 that should take up two episodes and then just one or two episodes later is the big finale.

And it’s not like they could combine the two fights when the point of one is for the fire benders to have no bending and the conflict of the other is that fire benders are 100x stronger.

With these odds, it’s far more likely they’re removing it to have more time for the main plot. What do you all think? Let me know in the comments!

And if you want to see my full review, find it here.

[fictionalnormalcy]

A while ago I looked up the Wikipedia page for DreamWorks Dragons Race to the Edge, because I wanted to see if there was a behind-the-scenes video released that I missed. I didn’t find what I was looking for, but I did come to read through the page. Coming to find something else that frankly, made me fall in love with the show even more. So the show was initially green-lighted for four seasons. Then later on they were renewed for a fifth and sixth.

It made me think of the high stakes we were given in the last three seasons. How the Shellshocker project came to fall through, the introduction of two other villains, and leading into more of an introduction on Drago. For a summary of what happened in the five years between HTTYD 1 and HTTYD 2, I am rather impressed on how well they managed to wind in all that they did.

However, it led me to realize that Viggo was meant to be the main antagonist for the series. He was probably never meant to be redeemed. But if it hadn’t been for the extra two season renewal, the show would’ve probably ended with the decimation of the Dragon Hunters, and of course the Dragon Riders heading back to Berk.

Obviously, the writers found out within a good timeline to be able to adjust the show and decide what they would wind into the remaining two seasons. But it also made me wonder, Krogan wasn’t meant to have more episodes as an antagonist. The plot addition of Viggo having lived and the Dragon Eye once more coming under the enemies’ side as well as the race to find the King of Dragons and also adapt to Johann being a traitor, they couldn’t have possibly fit all that into four seasons.

And now knowing that there was initially supposed to be four seasons, guys I am reeling.

[vi0let-delight]

Lane Kim

Okay here’s how I would fix some of Lane’s storylines/life in Gilmore girls because the writers did her SO dirty:

Henry makes a reappearance in season 4 while Lane is staying in Rory’s dorm. He goes to Harvard pre-med but has some friend/roommate who knows someone who goes to Yale and runs into Lane

They catch up about how Henry wants to be a pediatrician instead of a surgeon like his parents want (plays into Henry and Lane being endgame) and Lane talks about getting kicked out and this starts a friendship between the two

Lane still moves in with the band, and her storyline with Zach stays more or less the same but it doesn’t go as far

They break up some time between season 5 and 6, but before Rory’s 21st so Henry goes with her. Lane and Zach realize they have a lot of differences, and not that much in common besides music and the band (no chemistry either)

Henry is mentioned here and there, and comforts Lane when her and Zach break up but just as friends, goes with her to Rorys 21st birthday and both lament about how being 21 wasn’t a big exciting thing for either of them and have a fun night

Lane’s night with Henry inspires her to want to go back to school to study music. She mentions in the diorama episode she wants to compose and write music so figured taking some classes would be good for her character.

Zach messes up the showcase because of his ego and worrying that Lane is moving on “too soon” from their breakup, seeing how much her and Henry talk and the band still breaks up and she moves back in with her mother

Lane and Mrs. Kim get closer when lane tells her about wanting to take some music classes to expand her craft and Mrs. Kim helps her and they talk about music and bond a little bit

During the time the bands apart, Lane introduces Henry to Mrs.Kim but makes it clear they’re just friends, more so she doesn’t disapprove too much when they talk which bristles Henry but moves on.

The band gets back together and Zachdoes try to win Lane back, but she declines, realizing she has feelings for Henry.

The band still goes on tour and takes a gig near Harvard and after one gig decides to see Henry to confess her feelings but in GG fashion there’s a girl at his dorm/apartment so she doesn’t confess her feelings and distances herself from Henry

Annoyingly ASP doesn’t give much of a storyline for the rest of season 6/7 for Lane besides getting married and becoming pregnant which I hate but easy work around

The band FINALLY records an album (brought up and never mentioned again in the show as far as I can remember)

Since Lane has been taking composing classes and writing classes she writes a great song (about Henry) that goes on the album and the band loves it. Realizing it’s about Henry the band encourages her to peruse her feelings but doesn’t want to disrupt his life and is also content with where she’s at in her life.

The band finishes the album, and they send it all over and do a new showcase and sign to a record label. Lane’s song becomes a mini hit and the band goes on tour as an opening act for (The Raconteurs)

Henry comes to see his family and comes to see Lane, wondering what went wrong in their friendship, and she tells him everything, and about the song and she gives him the CD. She’s okay if he just wants to be friends because she’s tired of staying away from someone who gets her. Henry kisses her, and says he’s missed her like crazy, and doesn’t just want to be her friend and will jump through whatever kind of hoops Mrs.Kim puts up for them, because they missed their chance once and doesn’t want to mess it up. Lane tearfully let’s him know she’s about to go on tour and who knows what else that can lead to, but he smiles and says he’s happy to wait. But Lane knows from watching Rory’s, Lorelei’s, and her own relationships and doesn’t know if it’ll work so Henry doesn’t push it but says he’s happy to be there for her in what capacity she needs.

Lane and Rory have their meaningful talk about their life and love as they prepare to leave to two life changing opportunities and proud and sad for how different their lives turned out to be but are happy for each other. Leading into the series finale

The going away party for Rory still happens, and Lane and Mrs.Kim have a hear to heart, where Mrs.Kim finally comes to terms with the fact that Lane isn’t the daughter she expected but is happy with the person Lane has become, they hug briefly and Henry shows up. Mrs.Kim gives them her blessing of course with a scary lecture and heads off home.

Lane asks how he’d know she was there, and says Rory called him, and camera pans to Rory, giving a cute little wave, saying to Lane to just go for it, and take the chance.

They talk and Henry doesn’t want to pressure her but tells her he got accepted to Yale medical school and will be a little closer to Stars Hollow. Lane is screaming on the inside, but is excited and says maybe when she’s back they can go on a real date. Henry asks for her schedule dates because he’s always wanted to be a groupie. They kiss and Lane’s story is left with possibilities and wonder.

[portiaadams]

The Lost Prologue

Once upon a time, Tomorrow and Tomorrow and Tomorrow had a prologue set in the hours after the series finale in October of 1932. Pretty quickly I realized I was going to make a major change that made this prologue obsolete, but some of you (@manhattan-mari) have been around so long you’ve read it. Clara’s husband was supposed to be a mystery...

October 1932

With a flourish, she made her last pencil mark in the manuscript. Finished. She could mail it first thing in the morning, and sleep tonight knowing it was finally complete. Quickly she moved through the first floor, righting pillows, turning off lights, and checking the doors. She knew her work was for naught-as soon as her husband left the bath and she went to take one he would methodically check every door and window, just like he had every night since they moved in over seven years ago, before looking in on the (hopefully sleeping) children and then joining her in bed.

Her back foot was already on the bottom stair when the phone rang. She looked down at her watch. 10:30. The ringing bell caused fear to snatch at her heart. No good phone calls came this late. She automatically lifted her eyes up the stairs. The four people she loved best in the world were already upstairs, either tucked into bed or taking a bath. She took a deep breath and turned back to answer the ringing nuisance.

"Hello?"

"Ma'am, I'm looking for Clara Thompson." She blinked but didn't answer. "Ma'am?"

She shook her head. "I used to be Clara Thompson. I mean, that was my maiden name. I've been married a long time."

"This is the Atlantic City Sheriff's Department. You're Enoch Thompson's daughter?"

Her breath left her body. She had dreaded this call for years, yet she always known it was coming.

"Who killed him?" she asked tersely. Lansky? Charlie? Not AR, he was long dead. The papers were full of Capone's troubles, so she doubted it was he (suddenly she could hear "you gotta meet my friend Al," followed by another voice saying "he called me Frankenstein" and felt an eleven-year-old rage flare).

She didn't even know who else might be a player, or if there was another deadly assassin haunting the Boardwalk. Her heart panged, then. For her youth. For the balcony off her room on the 8th floor of the Ritz-Carlton ("I can make the porch roof flat and you can have a balcony here," her husband telling her, pencil twirling in his hand. She loved it, because he built it for her, because some nights when the children were in bed and the weather fine she lay against him on the floor of the balcony and her heart still fluttered like it was the first time she'd ever been held by him) her father had occupied for most her young life. For the taste of hot dogs comingling with sea air. For the sound of waves crashing into the shore. For the sweaty feel of her others half's hand as they ran across the boardwalk, which they treated as their own personal fiefdom. For the smokey-salty campfire taste of the lips of the love of her life during their first kiss. For the smell of zinc oxide and sea salt on the skin of the first baby she ever loved.

"Thomas Darmody."

"I'm sorry, what?"

"Thomas Darmody? He's apparently the son of a former associate of your father's, James Darmody?"

Jimmy. His face swam before her eyes. His voice echoed in her head, "I thought you loved me, Nuck" as she, recovering from an injury, clung to the back of a chair and tried to make the men she loved best in the world (then, at least, although she already knew her feelings were fracturing) stop hurting each other. "He's home for you, and you are home for him. And he's gotta come home." Words she never heard him say out loud, but that she had read so many times she saw the thick lines of his penmanship as she thought them.

"No. No." She said, dropping the phone and running up the stairs, knowing she was being ridiculous but still, after all these years...

The bathroom door opened, and she heard her husband's footfall behind her. "Clara?" he asked as she flung the door open to the bedroom at the top of the stairs. The dog asleep on the foot of the bed, where he had slept every night for the last seven years, looked up at her curiously. The boy, their boy, sitting on the window seat built especially so he could sit there and stargaze, his telescopes neatly stored on the built-in shelves around the window.

Now he sat there reading, and looked at her like she had gone mad. 

"Is everything okay?" he asked, the apple-cheeked cherub who stole her heart now transformed into a pile of long bones and floppy dark hair.

"Clara?" Her husband asked again, now behind her with his hand on her arm and concern in his voice.

She attempted to approximate a normal smile for the boy. "Just saying good night, and that it's time for lights out," she said brightly and closed the door behind her. She took her husband's hand (it's going to be okay, she told him the first time she ever touched his hand, in a house full of people she hasn't seen for years) and led him to the landing of the stairs.

"My father's dead," she told him, her voice cracking a little. He reached out and placed his other hand against her face.

"I'm sorry."

"It's...the police said Thomas Darmody shot him."

[sapphirevulpix]

Update

Due to some recent (and not so recent) developments, All plots involving Sapphire and Taryn are being rebooted. I was unhappy with how their plots were being written, and so I have been in talks with others to incorporate them into other blogs while I work on an upcoming plot unrelated to either, with an entirely new cast of characters. Their stories are not being completely erased, however Sapphire’s story is being reset to immediately after the flashback arcs with Frost, and Taryn will be making more frequent appearances on @the-void-between-worlds as a side character, with the current rp on @sapphire-vulpix-rp with Rime continuing and remaining canon. As for this blog, it will go back to being what it was intended to be in the first place: a mod blog and a place to shitpost/dump doodles and art, with occasional asks and no real plot. This blog was never intended to have a plot and it led to me being unhappy with essentially shoehorning it in, hence why these changes are being made. I’ll be sure to announce and boost the new blogs once they’re up and running! Thank you all for following along thus far, and I hope you all enjoy what’s to come~

[itsonlythefirstdraft]

Coming up with an amazing, plot-altering idea for your novel!

...While in the middle of writing said story:

[ebaeschnbliah]

A  DOG  BARKS  IN  THE  NIGHT  -  AGAIN

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It’s more than a year ago when I posted the discovery of the barking dog in this scene of ASIP. (X)

It happened again. While taking pics for ‘A Study in Pink and Green’ I stumbled once more across the sound of a barking dog. This time in PILOT. 

Of course, one might say that this is nothing out of the ordinary. ASIP is the redone, prolonged and slightly altered version of PILOT after all. Someone had the idea to put a barking dog in PILOT and this idea had then been adopted for ASIP as well. End of story. 

Not quite. The really interesting point is …. that the sound of the barking dog has been moved to a completely different scene.

In ASIP the barking starts right after John wakes from his nightmare, at the very beginning, in the intro of the episode.

In PILOT the barking of a dog can be heard almost at the end of the episode

Serial killer Jeff Hope just got shot. Sherlock stares down on the dead man. DI Lestrade arrives and joins the police force that is alredy in the street below, shouting repeatedly ‘Who is firing?’ and ‘Clear the area!’. Sherlock looks out the window and deduces that the gunshot must have come from the slightly open window of a brightly lit room across the street. 

The scene changes. DI Lestrade walks up to the ambulance where Sherlock is treated. That’s the moment when the dog starts barking …. loud and clearly …

The barking stops the moment before Sherlock asks DI Lestrade ‘Why have I got this blanket?’

Later ... when Sherlock finally deduces that John had been the one who shot the cabbie, he interrupts his conversation wit Lestrade, makes a quick excuse and starts walking towards John. The DI stops him with a question:

LESTRADE: Sherlock … Were you right? SHERLOCK: I’m sorry? LESTRADE: Did you choose the right pill? SHERLOCK: I dunno. In all the confusion, I lost track. I don’t know which I chose. LESTRADE: Maybe he beat you. SHERLOCK: Maybe. But he’s dead.

Sherlock turns away and walks over to John. Lestrade sniggers softly and lets him go. And a dog starts barking again ….

The barking can be heard even through the first part of Sherock’s and John’s dialogue. It vanishes with the sentence ‘What did you do with the gun?’

What an interesting change. What might have been the reason behind it? Why move the sound of the barking dog from the end of the PILOT episode to the beginning of ASIP? Those two scenes aren’t connected in any way. The barking of that dog isn’t necessary for the storyline. Then … why choose a totally different scene for it? 

Well, maybe those things just changed because the creators of the show love to be .... changable? They changed other things of seemingly no importance for the plot as well:

You said you could identify a software designer by his tie and a retired plumber by his left hand.  PILOT

You said you could identify a software designer by his tie and an airline pilot by his left thumb.   ASIP

or this:

Three years ago I successfully proved to Inspector Lestrade that at the time of a particularly vicious triple murder, Angelo was in a completely different part of town, car-jacking.  PILOT

Three years ago I successfully proved to Lestrade at the time of a particularly vicious triple murder that Angelo was in a completely different part of town, house-breaking.  ASIP

Or the date of Sherlock’s and John’s first meeting … with undeniable, visible evidence too …. from 14.January to 29.January. Why? What does it matter?

Or this: 

“Twenty-two Northumberland Terrace. Please come.”  (PILOT)

“Twenty-two Northumberland Street. Please come.”  (ASIP)

And gain with visable effidence. A shot of the relevant sign has extra been included.

And the barking dog has moved as well ….  from the end to the beginning. From two mostly Sherlock-centered scenes to one that focuses solely on John. Strange. 

I leave you to your own deductions. Thanks @callie-ariane for the scripts.

July, 2018

@gosherlocked @sarahthecoat @sherlockshadow @raggedyblue @possiblyimbiassed @sagestreet @tjlcisthenewsexy @devoursjohnlock @sherlock-overflow-error

[warriors-rewritten-chaos]

Ravenpaw's Path Rewritten

I remember getting in trouble for reading these books in math class instead of paying attention back in middle school. *sigh* Sweet, sweet nostalgia... Not too much actually changes here, but there is one fairly significant change that isnt too important right now, but it will be later...

Ravenpaw and Barley are relaxing in the barn one day until a group of cats appear out of seemingly nowhere. They beg the two to be allowed to stay in the barn for a short time. Upon noticing that one of the cats is heavily pregnant, they agree. The strangers say that they are former city cats who were recently forced to run from the city due to the New Coven of Blood (Ravenpaw and Barley are shocked to hear that the group is still active, albeit under new leadership) and introduce themselves. The pregnant molly is Minty and her mate is Willie, and the others are Snapper, Pounce, and Tess.

Soon, Minty gives birth to four healthy kits: Icicle, Squall, Snowflake, and the runt of the litter Sniff. Ravenpaw is happy to help care for the kits, but Barley is suspicious of them. He swears that he recognizes the group from somewhere, but he just can't place where...

Five moons later, and Barley (and Ravenpaw too) is becoming increasingly suspicious and concerned about the group of strange cats. The adults are teaching the kits dangerous battle moves, and Sniff is mostly ignored while her larger and stronger siblings receive most of the love and attention of the group. Ravenpaw does their best to play with her and give her positive attention and Sniff adores him for it.

That morning, Willie tells Ravenpaw and Barley that the group has decided to stay at the barn permanently instead of leaving as planned once the kits are of age to travel. When Barley and Ravenpaw protest, the group tell them that it's non-negotiable and violently attack the two and drive them away from the barn. When Violet attempts to intervene, they threaten to kill her and she is forced to flee back into the farmhouse as her brother and his mate flee into the forest.

The two decide to enlist the help of their friends in ThunderClan to drive out the rogues. On the way there, they discover a trio of kits playing by Fourtrees. Upon learning that the kits are from WindClan, they round the rambunctious siblings up and head towards WindClan territory. They end up interrupting an escalating fight between a WindClan patrol lead by the kits' panicked mother and a confused ThunderClan patrol. The mother is overjoyed for the return of her kittens and the ThunderClan patrol takes the two back to ThunderClan to meet with Firestar.

Upon their return, Ravenpaw is tackled by Dustpelt before he and Barley can begin to explain why they're there. Dustpelt is very happy to see his littermate and practically drags Ravenpaw into the Nursery so he can meet he and his mates' newborn sons Spiderkit and Shrewkit. While in the Nursery, Ravenpaw also finds Firestar with his own kits Squirrelkit and Leafkit. He and Barley are finally able tell Firestar and Dustpelt what happened to them.

Dustpelt is ready to commit murder, but Ravenpaw convinces him that all they want is for the squatters to leave and murder is unnecessary. Firestar lets Ravenpaw and Barley take a small group of Warriors consisting of Dustpelt, Thornclaw, Sandstorm, and Graystripe back to the barn with them to drive away the rogues. Much to their surprise, they encounter the rogues fleeing from the barn- minus Willie and Sniff. Minty is particularly distraught and the (remaining) kits are very obviously traumatized. When asked why they're leaving, all they can get out of them is that there are new intruders in the barn that murdered Willie and they're leaving so they won't be next.

They disappear before Ravenpaw can even ask where Sniff is. With much trepidation, the group enters the barn. A pair of toms with tooth-spiked colors and bloody claws are standing over Willie's body. They look as shocked to see Barley as Barley is to see them. These are the Coven cats Scorpion and Snake, but Barley knows them as his and Violet's littermates who remained with The Coven of Blood while they left.

Snake and Scorpion are both shocked. They were apparently told that their siblings had died rather than ran away and seem genuinely happy to see their brother again. They start to ask about Violet before she comes running into the barn after seeing the commotion. She just stares in shocked silence, seemingly not knowing whether or not to be more shocked by the corpse or the reappearance of her long-lost siblings.

Snake and Scorpion begin asking frantic questions: is this where you've been all this time? why did you leave? why were we told that you'd died? is this scrawny weirdo your mate, Crusher?

When interrupted and asked why they killed Willie by Sandstorm, the toms have an easy answer. When Claw made The New Coven of Blood after the death of Scourge, there was a big struggle for leadership. Willie was one of the cats who attempted to seize control of the new organization by killing Claw. He failed, but he and his co-conspirators had escaped and Claw had essentially put a hit out on them. Whoever brought their bodies back to the Coven would be awarded a position of power as Claw's Second.

After Claw and the remains of The New Coven were defeated, the brothers noticed Willie's scent close by the barn and upon recovering from their battle wounds, sought him out to kill him and bring his body back to the city to use the influence it would give them to recreate The Coven again, but this time with the two of them in charge. They happily offer to bring Barley and Violet along, the four of them could rule together! Barley and Violet are horrified and disgusted by the awful cats their brothers have become and reject the offer immediately.

Heartbroken and angry, Snake and Scorpion attack their littermates in retaliation, but are easily beaten back by them and the patrol and Barley and Violet disown the two and chase them off. Graystripe asks Sandstorm if they should be worried about the two of them possibly making a new Coven, but Sandstorm tells him that they're too weak to do that. Willie's body is buried and the patrol says goodbye to the barn cats.

Meanwhile, in WindClan territory, the queen Dandelionfur encounters a small black kitten wandering alone. She asks the kit her name, and she pauses for a moment before replying that her name is Raven. She follows Dandelionfur back to WindClan as the book ends.