Did a lot of work on things today! My favourite task being splicing together like 25 takes to make the perfect version of a single line that I then proceeded to just rephrase entirely, nullifying my hours of fastidious fussing.
To be completely fair to me, it was the "Watching from the sidelines... what do you think about me and you?" line.
That is a very important line.
It's never quite sat right with me, though. In the original, I kept it so close to the vanilla line as, frankly, a kind of exercise in personal vindication. I wanted that line that had made me so sad so many years ago to instead spark joy with just one subtle flick.
But, I think rephrasing it works better. As it is, it's kind of awkwardly worded for such a personally revealing question. The original question is he's asking Shepard about what they think about him and EDI. It makes sense to be so blunt about it if it's about someone else. But this is the moment where Jeff properly lets his guard down for the first time, even if only partially, and only for a moment. Jokes and deflection will surely follow, but this question has to be real. So, we can do better. Jeff can do better.
I'm not agonising over every piece of the script to this same level of detail. If I did that, we'd be here until ME5 or whatever.
I would like to get this finished for N7 Day this year. Even in saying this, chances are high that I won't make that goal, but I'd very much like to aim for it. If I knuckle down and work on this every day, I stand a good chance of having something at least presentable by then.
I'm of two minds on whether I want to release video dailies or not, when I get to that point with this scene. On the one hand, keeping it a surprise and booting it all out the door at once would be exciting. On the other, seeing people get excited for my work gives me so much energy and motivation that I can really use. But then again, honestly, I'd also rather not kick the hornet's nest too much in terms of getting attention from people who don't understand what I'm doing, and are hostile to it. That's a concern, too!
I never did finish that follow-up video I intended to do about the talking points that arose from my meeting with the president of NAVA some years ago, but I think there could be value in laying all that out, because there still are a lot of misconceptions even as the debate has moved in different directions now.
Anyways. I'm here, I'm alive, I'm working on Hatboy, and I'd like to get it done this year. I'm tired of having my big art project just sitting there unfinished. Jeff deserves better, and more importantly, so do all of you!