Hiii I’m writing a Star Wars fic right now and I needed some help with an oc, she basically she split personality which she gained from all the stuff that happened with order 66. I don’t wanna make it offensive or wrong but she has two personalities one being “her self” aka trying to be a Jedi and the other being someone who finds joy and pleasure in the Sith and just being straight up evil
I wanted to do like what moon knight did, like the two people in the same body like how they could talk to each other in a reflection or hear each other but I just wanted to ask and make sure it’s not wrong
I have the fic on my account so if u look through it and smth about it is wrong I would love for you to tell me so I can learn more as a writer
Hello!
This would be more along the lines of sensitivity reading or beta reading, which is (more often than not) a paid job.
This blog is here mostly to offer advice and information at the beginning of the creation process. Doing a complete read-through and providing feedback on a finished project is outside the scope of what we do.
Given what you've written here, however, I will mention: it's generally best not to use fictional stories as your only source on disabilities. Real DID is nothing like how it's shown in Moon Knight and the show has actually been criticized heavily for the inaccuracies.
Also, please note that the idea of a dissociative disorder causing a "good" and "evil" personality is a trope that has caused a lot of harm in the past and if you plan on including the trope in your own writing, it should be done with careful thought and consideration.
If you haven't already, I'd strongly suggest taking a look through our pinned post for some information on what we do here and some posts that can be helpful.
If you do choose to hire a sensitivity reader, there are some resources in this post here [link].
Cheers,
~ Mod Icarus