Tatum's Blog

Hi I'm Tatum. I'm currently a junior at the University of Colorado Boulder and am studying Speech Language Hearing Sciences. I grew up in Golden, Colorado which is best known for the Coors Brewery. I like to play sports and am a huge bronco fan. I also have an addiction to reality tv. 

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Hey guys, welcome to my blog! My name is Ramisa (pronounced Ra-miss-a) and I’m currently a senior studying computer science at CU Boulder. I’m an American Bangladeshi. Originally from New York, but mostly raised in Parker, CO. Although I was born and raised in the states, my roots have kept me...

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I loved your bio! You seem like a really fun and have great positive energy! I also love to go to concerts. I love that how you put your relationships with your siblings!

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Hey WRTG3020, the name is Megan. I’m a junior here at CU, studying psychology and the great wonders of the human mind. I’ll let you know when I find something.

I’m from Tempe, Arizona. Therefore, I will never get used to the cold weather here or the hot weather there. I’ve obviously made some...

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Oh my gosh Garrus is so cute! Arizona sounds so nice, I'm from Colorado and still am not used to the cold weather. I love the layout of your blog and also really enjoyed your avatars!

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My name is Chandler Gavin & I am a senior psychology major at the University of Colorado at Boulder. I am originally from Wisconsin, therefore I’m a huge Packer fan! My world revolves around my seven month old toy australian shepherd named Olive. My hobbies include art, hiking, and most...

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Chandler! Glad to know there's another football fan in the class but I'm a bronco fan good thing were not in the same division! Your blog is organized and really easy to read!

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Hi!

My name is Ciara Green (pronounced Kira) and I am a Junior here at CU studying Ecology and Evolutionary Biology. I live in Libby Hall, where I have been an RA for the past 2 years. This semester I am also taking Organic Chemistry, Evolution, and Primate Behavior. I also undergrad TA for the...

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Ciara you're blog is so interesting! It sounds like to are taking a heavy course load this semester! I also lived in Libby my freshman year! I can't believe your graduating class only had 4 students! thats crazy to me!

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In west side Chicago born not raised, in South Korea is where I spent most of my days… Chilling in school, swimming and hanging with friends when my Dad went to Colorado, he fell in love and he said, “we are moving to Colorado, the place where I never heard of.”

Lived in...

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wow! It sounds like you have traveled a lot! I'm so jealous I love to travel and Korea is somewhere I've always wanted to go!

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Avatars

Gender conformer- I think our society expects women to be girly and sexy but not slutty. 

Gender rebel- My gender rebel is tomboyish and is pretty covered up.

GenderBender- My gender bender not girly like the conformer but still sexy. 

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Boy Scouts of America

I watched the short documentary on the discrimination within Boy Scouts of America. 

The film starts by introducing the view to two men involved with Boy Scouts of America. One a young man pursuing to receive a high title in the Scouts and the other a man who desired to be a leader in the program since he was a young man. Later on in the documentary the viewers learn that both these men have been discriminated on because of their sexual orientation. I think that the documentary telling us about the men before mentioning the discrimination was great use of kairos. The viewers feel worse for the boy scouts because they know them before. If the documentary went right into the discrimination I don't think the viewer would be as emotionally involved.

I think that the ethos of the story is creditable because both men were a part of the boy scouts not just people outside of the community judging it.

The story used pathos the most in my opinion. Both of the men loved the scouts so much and seemed so nice that I really liked them. I was very emotionally involved and it actually got me heated when I found out they kicked one of them out.

The documentary used logos by giving facts about the scouts and the church involved with the scouts but I don't think that logos is very useful in this documentary. I don't believe that people will change their minds on their opinions because of facts. I think that it's rare that people change their mind at all, but if they do I think it's because they've seen it and find compassion for the people they are judging so I think that Pathos would be the most affective. 

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Spice It Up

I chose to use the writing tool Activate Your Verbs. This tool emphasized that writers should never use passive verbs when they can use active verbs which I realize I do a lot in my writing. It also mentioned to avoid verb qualifiers. My changes were small but I think that they made a difference and made my voice much larger.

Original: 

He had come home with a brand new tattoo on the left side of his newly shaved head. It was kind of weird seeing him with such short hair because he had always had long, shaggy, brown hair. The tattoo was of an alien like woman, filled with greenish blue ink, and covered the majority of the side of his head. He had a variety of tattoos distributed all over his body. Most of them creeped my sister and me out because they were all of peculiar dark creatures. It was like him to love odd things . His room was decorated with scary stuffed animals and frightening masks, which turned my sister and me from ever going in. My grandma very much disapproved of all of his weird fascinations. When he walked into the living room with his new ink she was livid. She asked him, “How could you ever do that to your head?” He replied with a simple, “It’s different.” And that’s exactly what my uncle Scotty was, different. 

Revised: 

He came home with a brand new tattoo on the left side of his newly shaved head. It was weird seeing him with such short hair because he had always had long, shaggy, brown hair. The tattoo was of an alien like woman, filled with greenish blue ink, and covered the majority of the side of his head. He had a variety of tattoos distributed all over his body which creeped my sister and me out because they were all of peculiar dark creatures. He loved odd things. He decorated his room with scary stuffed animals and frightening masks, which turned my sister and me from ever going in. My grandma disapproved of all of his weird fascinations. When he walked into the living room with his new ink she was livid. She asked him, “How could you ever do that to your head?” He replied with a simple, “It’s different.” And that’s exactly what my uncle Scotty was, different. 

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Here's my avatar made on the south park page!

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Formal vs. Informal

 When I’m writing something informal I don’t  have a process I can write out whatever I’m feeling since it’s usually just my opinion. I do however have to consider who my audience is.I have to make sure that what I am writing is intriguing enough to make others what to view it. I also have to think about where it is going and if it could possibly be seen by people other than my intended viewers.I don't have to follow certain rules with punctuation but I do have to consider how I want to be viewed by my audience. Unlike formal writing, you can have a voice when writing informal and it's important to make your writing more personal. 

When I’m writing something formal like a paper I start out first by writing down all my important points or ideas in bullet points. Then I put the ones that relate together into a group. Next I write my first draft. Unlike an informal essay, I have to revise formal papers many times before submitting it in. I also have to follow a set of rules with formal writing.

 In both the photo of Plato I found online and the one that’s in the book he looks angry. This makes me think that he was a cranky person. The book also said that he did not like rhetoric so maybe he was angry in all the pictures because it’s a book about rhetoric . Maybe Plato was frustrated because he felt more intelligent than his peers.