Chapter 36 deleted scenes
I figured I'd share a couple of scenes that were originally going to go differently. Admittedly, I don't have the actual text anymore, but I can tell you how they was supposed to go.
The meeting with Lady Hen is nothing like I originally planned. Remember how Azula said that there were some older women who wanted to marry Zuko? Yeah, Lady Hen was going to be one of them. She was going to spend the majority of their meeting flirting with him, and Zuko would alternate between being confused and creeped out. Azula was going to "conveniently" drop in to save him. I decided the Lord Nibui was creepy enough and changed her into a snotty noble.
Also, the meeting with the Fire Sage was also originally planned differently. He was going to act as a scribe that would ask Zuko about what all he did while he was banished and a fugitive. Zuko was going to spend most of the conversation alternating between dodging questions, giving half-answers, and trying to come up with believable lies. I felt like the chapter was getting a little long without anything really happening, and it was already pretty dialogue heavy. I do like what I changed the conversation to, and I may revisit the possibility of a scribe asking Zuko questions.
Lastly, the answer Zuko gave to Mai. Originally, Zuko told her the worst thing that ever happened to him was hope. He listed off some situations where he had hope only for things to go wrong. Ozai declared that hope for was children and those who lack the power to change their situation. Naturally, Mai's father loudly agreed with him. I didn't know where to take the conversation after that, and I felt like it might be just a little too angsty. Especially considering that Zuko was trying not to ruin the dinner. I also considered how Azula would probably respond to this, so I decided to rewrite it. Honestly, this was the scene I struggled with the most. I wanted Zuko to be slightly honest without being too angsty or making his answer too unbelievable. I'm not entirely sure I love how I decided to write this scene, but it did give Zuko the excuse he needed to leave the dining room and run into Ty Lee.
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