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Rhetorical Analysis

In the passage “Obesity, What’s to Blame?” Jennifer Edmond talks about obesity being an epic problem in our society now. Edmond clearly states this on growing epidemic is lead by many unhealthy factors and majority of the time leads to many health issues. The author in this passage uses the classical form of arguments to get her point across in a clear precise way. Jennifer quickly jumps into the passage by explaining what it is classified as being obese and what is classified as being overweight, which is critical just to make sure everyone knows the difference and starts off on the same page of understanding. Jennifer even adds a picture with a key that shows how much and how fast obesity has grown.

To explain the cause of the first picture the author then immediately jumps into the most common reason for this fast growing epidemic. Jennifer brings it to our attention that obesity is continuously growing due to our excess calories that lead to the storage of fat. The author makes sure to point out the fact our portions have only grown larger and larger as years gone, being one of the many reasons why our bodies are storing fat and making us gain weight.

The author of the passage then quickly shifts over and points out that obesity isn’t such a bad thing to many people. This made the author not seem so one sided. Edmond then points to an article where the president of South Africa’s nephew states “he is too ill with heart disease to his weight and lavish lifestyle”, showing that even though he’s so obese he does not blame anything but his wealth and lavish life, which no one would ever see wealth and lavishness as a bad thing. This is specially interesting because the author then ties it into her own person experience with how being obese and overweight in Haiti is also viewed as something beautiful. This makes the tone turn into something deeper than just research because it actually hits home.

Jennifer Edmond also keeps the audience engaged by asking questions such as “is obesity a choice or does it just happen?” keeping the readers up to par with metacognition. The author keeps the passage in general very interesting due to all the pictures and statistics to back up their views and to be more clear and credible. In the end Jennifer Edmond’s rhetorical tequniques, statistics, and personal anecdotes very well persuaded the readers into believing her stance. In order to completely understand obesity and its health complications we need to be well educated and understand what causes it and how we can reduce the epidemic.

Research Outline

1) Introduction:

a) What the obesity epidemic is, and who it affects

b) Leading health hazards obesity causes

c) The epidemic of obesity sweeping the globe leads to widespread health repercussions

2) Body paragraphs:

Paragraph1:

a) Many people are actually looking to put on weight

due to the new appealing look of being “thick” is the ultimate sex appeal.

b) Background/evidence info on what “thick” means

c) Explain how many different cultures believe “bigger is better”

so they encourage it

d) Explain what cultures believe in that and how they encourage others to

get “bigger”

Paragraph 2:

a) Fat: fighting the obesity epidemic (Pool, R)

b) Argument on how to fight the epidemic

c) Evidence, explaining dietary

Paragraph 3:

a) Why is obesity increasing?

b) Evidence (Source 2) the leveling of obesity epidemic since 1999 tis in with source #3, speaking from a medical perspective

c) Explanation

Paragraph 4:

a) Reasons why obesity is bad for your health

b) Source to support argument

c) Evidence, backup claims

Paragraph 5:

a) Is obesity a choice or a disease?

b) Evidence using source #6 Obesity, Health at every size

c) Taking a stance

Paragraph 6:

A) Freshman 15

b) overeating, stress, and lack of exercise

c) evidence

paragraph 7:

a) Lack of education on obesity and following health risk

b) Source #5 “A public health failure”

c) evidence on how we are illiterate when it comes to knowledge of obesity

paragraph 8:

a) Main leading health factors of obesity

b) Evidence from source

c) stance

Conclusion: Although obesity does not always lead to many other health conditions, in majority of the cases it does. Being educated and know how to make this epidemic slow down is a very important factor.

Journal Responses

After reading Jaeah’s response to “20 things you didn’t know about marijuana” I learned that Marijuana actually has a great history that many people I assume are unaware of. I feel that marijuana has become a social norm now. Everyone kind of likes to do it to fit in and be one of the cool kids of the crowd. I on the other hand wanted to be the total opposite, I always told myself I never wanted to be a person who smokes marijuana because it doesn’t seem to benefit anyone in any shape way or form. Jaeah’s response educated me on letting me know the medical benefits that it also has which is one of the many reasons people do use to justify their reasoning of smoking weed. Though I do not believe many people actially know the history into depth as Jaeah went to telling us about. I think the more and more weed becomes such a growing aspect that is being legalized that everyone should be required to learn about it. Its very important to know what we are putting into our bodies, especially if its been illegal for so long and is just now becoming legalized in many states. I do also like how the author does talk about how cannabis oil was placed in tombs of dead people, and as we know Egyptians always like to make sure that their loved ones were buried with things that they valued. It could also be for the loved one to be able to be in peace since cannabis was used to help relieve pain.

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After reading “A Prospective Study of Exposure to Rap Music Videos and African American Female Adolescents’ Health” and the response Jazmine has for it, it has really opened up my mind and views of things. Growing up as a young African American girl I too did always watch the rap music videos full of girls shaking their butts, cursing, fighting, drinking, and smoking and remember looking up to them and wishing I could be in their place someday. Growing up my parents were very strict and hated how my sibling and I worshipped those girls and guys. I was raised in a very strict Haitian-Caribbean Christian household and I found myself trying to part away from such a rich culture to just want to fight and fit in with my friends. By the age of 12 I was fighting weekly, getting suspended. My parents always wanted to know where I was getting such bad habits from and why I was acting up, I myself never had an explanation except for “just cause!”. Though in reality looking back, I see how much I’ve changed and why. As I started getting older, I started viewing such habits as being an ugly trait and something I never want to grow up doing. I have left those rap videos alone and have become more interested into the rich Afro-Caribbean culture. Reading this article and Jazmine’s response was a great eye opener!

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Journal Article

Erin, Rhinehart

Judging Your [Online] Relationships

April 2015

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http://moe.highline.edu:2209/ehost/detail/detail?sid=62b2e82a-3754-4e91-beb8-f9e77948908b%40sessionmgr4003&vid=0&hid=4109&bdata=JkF1dGhUeXBlPWlwJnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZSZzY29wZT1zaXRl#AN=102688632&db=a9h

In this article “Judging your [online] relationships by Erin Rhinehart focuses on how law students’ social media relationships and writing, which relates to us all. We often forget about how we get judged on social media and think we’re safe behind the computer or cellphone screen, but reality shows we’re still being criticized. There are many ways to make sure our writing is up to par for any situation, such as it being a writing assignment from our professor or a simple status we want to post on Facebook. One of the guidelines the article states is “knowing your audience”. Being aware of who will be able to view something simple such as your profile picture makes a huge difference and could lower your chances of being negatively judged by anyone on social media, acknowledge that certain things fit for specific categories. The second guideline that the article brings up is “know your friends”. Those who you chose to be your friend on social media play a big role. You usually want to befriend and communicate with those who are within the same mindset as you, for instance lawyers cannot become friends with jurors. The last rule this article points out is “know your strengths”. Knowing your strengths in writing is very important, if spelling is one of your weakness’s you might want to revise any comments, post or anything in such matter more than just once or twice before making it public.

Annotated Bibliography

Research Proposal

I. Research topic/title

Obesity epidemic and diseases it can lead to.

II. Background & Problem statement

Obesity has become an epidemic in American society. It affects more than half of our population. This epidemic has only become worse by the generation. Obesity has no age limit, and definitely does not discriminate against anyone. The rates of obesity have more than doubled over the past forty years and at the rate America is going its only getting worse for the future generations. The portion sizes of America are the biggest portions compared to other countries, which is one of the main reasons. This epidemic is also the cause of many other health issues that many are unaware of, such as diabetes, cardiovascular disease and many other serious conditions.

III. Objectives & Research Questions

1) Why is obesity bad for your health?

2) Why is obesity increasing?

3) What is the most common disease associated with obesity?

4) How can we decrease obesity rates?

5) Are there any drugs that can help reduce obesity?

6) Is obesity a choice or a disease?

7) What are some facts about obesity?

8) What have been some changes we’ve made to decrease obesity rates?

9) Is obesity expected to increase or decrease in the next 10 years?

10) Are certain people more prone to being obese than others? Why?

11)

IV. Methodology

One of the many ways I expect to find many answers to my question is by doing research. Another way I do expect to find more accurate and more into depth is by going to an obesity epidemic seminar that my Health science professor will be doing. This well help me understand more into depth many of risk, and factors that fall into the category and I will be receiving information from a very credible source. I will also be doing research work online at home, finding scholarly, credible resources to help back up my argument.

V. Expected outcomes, significance or rationale + agency

I expect to grow knowledge in this area of study, having that being overweight is something my family and I do struggle with. I also do wish to help the average obese person understand the health factors and issues that can also come along with this epidemic while understanding my persuasion using my resources from research.

Obesity has now become an epidemic in the United States of America. This subject has become interesting to me because of the simple fact that my family also suffers from obesity. Obesity is also known to cause other health issues that some of my family members do suffer from such as diabetes, which could due to genetics be passed down onto me. Another of the many reasons why I chose this topic is because of health risk and the factors that lead to it due to the fact of me taking the Health Science this quarter and comprehending the serious issues obesity could cause. I have been reading on the Internet about many problems that lead to this obesity epidemic. Putting on a few pounds never seems to be anything bad, but many people seem to get carried away and forget when and how to manage a healthy weight, portion food sizes, and to exercise frequently. Being in college I have come across many others who I went to school before college and have notice a major change in their size, they all have gained weight! Not to mention, I am a walking testimony due to the fact that I have gained more weight in the past two years being in college than I ever have in my life due to the fact of getting carried away and not disciplining my self and my food habits.

#BrainStormingMethodInADrawing

Brain Storming Method

Like many others in their 20′s and “prime time of life”, one of my favorite things to do is sleep! As many claim, right before going to sleep is the best time to think for me. I just sit in bed and let my mind wonder on many things, some relevant, some irrelevant. I find that is when I am most unique with ideas. My body is at rest but my brain is working its most during these times. I sometimes find it even better when I am listening to slow music that I can relate to. After thinking so much I eventually sleep on many of the thoughts then wake up the next morning still brain storming.

Though I may like to think right before going to sleep, when I wake up I generally have an idea of what I am leaning towards. I like to get the opinions of others and ask them for their feedback on what I am thinking of. In return I ask them about their subject and try to give them feedback on it too. The one thing that I do like about listening to others thoughts is the fact that I get to hear about a wide variety of someone who’s brain storming habits are completely different from mine and has many unique ideas for themselves, which also helps me create and open up many other options I too could feed off of. Throughout the day my mind will randomly brain storm, so my brain storming method cannot be drawn out, nor does it have a pattern. Brain storming comes in many different methods for me, my ideas come from all walks of life. For this research writing task my brain storming method has improved being in a writing class setting everyday. I find myself thinking more and more about my research subject. Rather than only thinking about it at any random given time, I actually think about it at the same time everyday. I still do think about it from time to time and debate on whether I picked the right topic. I have procrastinated on getting some of my research started. My brain storming process for this research project has been on and off, I have been really trying to rest as much as possible due to me being so congested and out of it so with that being said my brain storming method has not been up to par, but I have noticed that working on it everyday piece by piece has been a great way to help me build more knowledge on my subject and help me manage my time wisely to get all my pieces together to start writing.

#BrainStorming

If you were to look for another book to read after Roland Barthes Camera Lucida, in similar context, what would it be? What is the overall question that you are thinking might be explained over the course of theses two books? (What is the context that you have in mind?)

I would probably read another book by Barthes. I like how he takes photographs and interprets them into what he understands them to be.

1. Who seems to care about Roland Barthes and Camera Lucida? What is the context, platform of discussion, field of expertise, or profession that Camera Lucida is being associated with? / Who would be writing these other papers or writings?

Jeanne Willette the irony of Barthes writing the book while he had little time left living.

2. How are these Camera Lucida citings used? / What point(s) are trying to be made in this new writing?

Talks a bout how Barthes focused on the "odd balls" of society because he was always the "odd one out". Death is the eidos of that photography.

3. What are they generally talking about in these other writings? What is it about?

How he turned a disadvantage into an advantage, his mother dying, him being the odd one out, and suffering from tuberculosis.

4. From what source did you find this reference?

http://www.arthistoryunstuffed.com/roland-barthes-camera-lucida/

5. Can that reference source be associated with any context of profession or association?

Other authors

Photography majors from the University of Texas in Austin

2. How are these Camera Lucida citings used? / What point(s) are trying to be made in this new writing?

The study of language through pictures/photography.

3. What are they generally talking about in these other writings? What is it about?

How photos will carry elements that will we call "Will-be dead".

4. From what source did you find this reference?

http://viz.dwrl.utexas.edu/content/roland-barthes-photography

5. Can that reference source be associated with any context of profession or association? Writers, and photograph majors.

Literary criticizers question the writing of Barthes, and wonder why he feels the way he feels about photographs.

2. How are these Camera Lucida citings used? / What point(s) are trying to be made in this new writing?

How Barthes sees pictures as dead, and sometimes is obsessed with his own dead and his dead mother.

3. What are they generally talking about in these other writings? What is it about?

The concerns of what separates a good photograph from a great one.

4. From what source did you find this reference?

http://quarterlyconversation.com/camera-lucida-by-roland-barthes-review

5. Can that reference source be associated with any context of profession or association?

Other literary criticizers

Brian Dillon talks about how this book changed the history of photographs.

2. How are these Camera Lucida citings used? / What point(s) are trying to be made in this new writing?

That the picture does not mean much, it is the way you choose to translate it. "in order to see a photograph well, it is best to look away or close your eyes."

3. What are they generally talking about in these other writings? What is it about?

How this book is so moving.

4. From what source did you find this reference?

http://www.theguardian.com/books/2011/mar/26/roland-barthes-camera-lucida-rereading

5. Can that reference source be associated with any context of profession or association?

other Authors

1. Who seems to care about Roland Barthes and Camera Lucida? New York times. What is the context, platform of discussion, field of expertise, or profession that Camera Lucida is being associated with? Grief and photography.

Who would be writing these other papers or writings? Those from New York who find photography interesting.

2. How are these Camera Lucida citings used? / What point(s) are trying to be made in this new writing? Points being made with this article is saying that this story is a sad attempt to come to terms with his grief, over the death of his mother, and to also come to an understanding that someday he will also be dead.

3. What are they generally talking about in these other writings? What is it about? Taking a look at photography history.

4. From what source did you find this reference? New York times website/news paper.

5. Can that reference source be associated with any context of profession or association? Other authors

All these pictures relate because its all food.

Pages 103-end

This part of the book is really interesting because it grasps my attention, it basically says that a picture holds so much value that if it is taken by the wrong photographer it could give off the wrong vibe. Its crazy to think that just by looking at a picture we get our own perception of it, whether its bad or good.

Reading Pages 94-102

I find this reading very interesting. Its just like the in class activity we did, it really captured my attention. Pictures that are not made for public and are made for privates that do turn into a public photo is made to be portrayed in a very negative way as we have seen while doing our in class project. It is crazy to think that we base a lot of our "facts" which are really "opinions" off of a picture that we just didn't read deep enough into.

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