Warrior Nun’s Fan Fiction Book Club pick:
@littledata - The Devil’s Daughter
As I read through the first time around, I was taken aback by how intricately crafted the story is. From the very beginning, we are placed into a state of complete helplessness alongside Ava. “Ava’s mother is frightened and so Ava decides she’s frightened too,” This first sentence captivated me then and continues to captivate me now. How so little was expressed, and yet, the moment you read it, you’re that seven-year-old too: afraid of the unknown, afraid of death.
The first time I ever read littledata’s one-shot, it was nighttime in the dead of a rainy winter. I was on my yellow reading chair with at least three blankets on top of me. I could not put it down. The longer I read, the more I mourned, for I knew that I would never have enough. It’s the kind of story you never want to end.
"It is a huge house, taller than it is wide, all weathered brickwork and dramatic turrets. It’s ugly though, she thinks - there are too many chimneys and windows and it’s confusing to look at, the eye doesn’t know quite where to land. Wikipedia told her it was built in 1863, although she didn’t truly appreciate what that meant until now: it has the presence of something old, settled into the hillside as if it were always there. As the road levels out and she drives towards the wide entrance, she has the impression that it’s waiting for something."
The writing style has a way of worming its way into your heart, a complete masterpiece of storytelling. Descriptions that leap from the page, exquisitely building the world and the characters around you. Its atmosphere alone is able to convey the themes of death, regret, longing and love.
One of my absolute favourite parts of the story are the full-circle moments, especially when this question gets answered:
“She wanted you so badly even though she knew she would only be with you for a little while. Does that make you feel special or does it make you feel angry?”
“I’m furious with you,” Beatrice tells her.
“I know,” Ava says, “But I’m not sorry.”
What I wouldn’t give for just another few moments of Ava and Beatrice together outside of the house. Yet, in the closing words, I am comforted because they loved and will continue to love.
"Oh." Beatrice reaches up to cup her cheek. "I missed you."
Ava turns her head and presses a kiss to the centre of her palm. "I'm here now. Are you ready to go?"
"Yes." Beatrice smiles up at her. "I think it's time."
Beautifully said!!! I'm actually so obsessed with this fic i fear i will look for it everywhere i go (like ava looking for the shadow guy)
Drizzle, love what you did with the photos.
I love this fic so much, top to bottom, but I think I want to start by talking about the way the story is structured. This story does something that is not always easy to do, in that it sets up two parallel and apparently unrelated supernatural aspects to the setting and does it in a way that doesn't feel like it's asking for too much in terms of suspension of disbelief. That's not easy! Unless you're running a "kitchen sink" setting where "all" the stories are true so anything could get thrown in at any time, I think people usually have a hard time with more than one major supernatural phenomenon.
This story succeeds at doing so beautifully, and I think that's a result of pure writing skill. We get the "devil" introduced right away, but then backgrounded. He's always in Ava's mind, but he's not present, which lets the "ghost" side of the story take the lead as The Supernatural Thing. BUT. The devil's never really gone. And throughout the story, we get reminders of him, many of them small, but three crucial moments: the Jillian introduction (other people have interacted with the devil); the Jillian rumor (this is what the devil does); and the crossroads (this is where you make a deal). All of these set the stage for the climax of the story in a way that ties the two supernatural threads together in a way that feels not just natural, but inevitable in context. There's no gotcha moments that surprise the reader with "you thought it was a story about X, but it's actually about Y too!" Everything is established early and developed steadily in a purposeful way where we learn exactly what we need in order to follow the threads to the conclusion.
The ghost story aspect is just as good, so much care taken to slowly establish the stakes. From the very beginning, Ava is there to get the house ready to be sold, and the slow drip of learning about Beatrice, how she exists and moves through this world, establishes how horrifying that will be for Beatrice. There was a slow horror to it all as a reader, "wait, so when the house gets sold...she won't...oh fuck." I also like how naturally the "rules" are established, the trial and error of it all, the way unknown dangers are established and hinted at. No one in this story has all the answers, and we won't get them either, because this is not a story about answers. It's a story about choices.
What would you sacrifice for someone you loved? What if what you had to sacrifice was yourself? What if they loved you back, so it wasn't only your sacrifice? How would you feel? How would they? If you knew how much it would hurt them, would you make a different choice? Such a huge density of feeling and gravity in relatively few words.
And this story resonates so powerfully with Avatrice. The choice at the end, Beatrice getting to live her life finally, knowing they'll be together after everything...I'm swooning. It's so, so, so good.















