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Art credits belong to Kique. I will not be sharing any edits from Patreon pages out of respect for the artist.

Thakir deserves better than his Viscountess/Friend abandoning him to run/take care of a Tribe while she sulks and flirts with Rome. Link to original: https://home-comic.thecomicseries.com/comics/902/

Thakir: Hey, Jahla? Sorry to bother you, but we've been wondering if you have made any decisions on the situation... Jahla: No... Maybe we should join Kainan. Thakir: Join Kainan? You're aware that none of us are trained fighters, right? That'll put the Tribe in danger! Jahla: We can't just leave them to deal with Marduk alone.

Thakir: Jahla, listen to me please. I know you're worried about them, but you have a Tribe of your own! Jahla: There must be something. Maybe the scrolls I collected have more information. Thakir: You're not listening to a word I say, are you? If you're so concerned about a Tribe that isn't your own, then just report it to the Capital! The Matriarch trusts you! You don't have to do any- Jahla: I am not going to go crying to the Capital every time I have an issue! This is my family!

Jahla: Ugh, Thakir, please... I can't just sit here. I have to help them somehow.

Jahla: They would do it for me. Rome: What happened this time? Thakir: Oh. Nothing new. Don't worry about it.

Thakir: With how often she leaves us, I should be Jarl... Yippee.

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Here, have a shitpost annotated pic I’ve been hoarding for awhile and haven’t posted… Neal Doughty is 500% done. My guess is one of his band mates injured themselves playing basketball again.

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Art credits belong to Kique. I will not be sharing any edits from Patreon pages out of respect for the artist.

The dialogue between Diarko & Kargo here is so stiff. You wouldn't even know that the Chief of the Ulvsbane Tribe is Diarko's father if you don't check the wiki. Why is Kargo's father suddenly being brought up anyway? I mean, I can see the intention. Diarko & Kargo bond through having horrible fathers, but the emotion Kique is aiming to create is lost due to his lack of show and tell. Also, why bring up Ranach in this conversation? And "Bear Cub"? As if bears aren't extinct because of DOGS, much like the Forngrym are implied to have almost been. Anyway. I hope my dialogue edits make more sense.

Link to original: https://home-comic.thecomicseries.com/comics/896/ https://home-comic.thecomicseries.com/comics/897/

Diarko: Hey, Kargo? Can I ask you a question? Kargo: Sure, as long as you don't lose focus.

Diarko: Do you have a father? Was he mean like mine? Kargo: Yes. Diarko: What happened to him?

Diarko: Oh... I don't want to have to kill my father. He is so big... He might- Kargo: Diarko, you should never kill except in self-defense. Take it from an outlaw. If you don't want to face him, don't. Never go looking for trouble. Diarko: I won't, I promise. I've seen so many die already... I just want to protect my family.

Kargo: Then you need to train well and grow strong! Diarko: Stronger than you? Kargo: Watch it.

Diarko: No! You watch it! Kargo: Ah!

Kargo: Nice swing, little warrior.

Kargo: Good! You're finding your balance. Diarko: But I failed to parry. Kargo: Don't beat yourself up, son. You'll learn.

Ronja: This is why I want you to train them. My father taught me that you should not be afraid of a little blood as long as you're still alive. He trained me well, but I've always been more of a hunter than a fighter... I once hesitated during a life or death situation, and my aunt suffered the consequences... I want my daughters to be able to defend themselves and each other in a crisis. I trust you.

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Home (Asmundr) Dialogue Edits (3)

Art credits belong to Kique. I will not be sharing any edits from Patreon pages out of respect for the artist. Link to original: https://home-comic.thecomicseries.com/comics/899/ https://home-comic.thecomicseries.com/comics/900/

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Uploading what I have missed from the most recent public pages, starting off where we left with the Marduk conversation. Changes: Naeva's reason for being upset with Ronja about Ranach is NOT because Ronja wants to kill Ranach. It is because Kargo is/was a killer, and he isn't a bad dog. Her Uncle Rogio also told her that Ranach is not a bad dog deep down, because where have we EVER seen that Ranach abused Rogio??? So, Naeva is upset because if Kargo isn't bad, then why should she believe Ranach is? I also erased the whole "I understand" shit... Anyway, the next change is Ruette NOT being your typical pretty poodle. She is Lykenia's second in command for a reason. I removed the whole "Ranach is smart!" praise, obviously...

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Art credits belong to Kique. I will not be sharing any edits from Patreon pages out of respect for the artist.

The conversation with the Rabisu (part 1).

The dialogue does not match the character's expression. I mean, "I'm so happy for you both," with the most bland stare ever? "Fuck." "Language" - smiling Kainan

It's like Kique doesn't know any other expression than "crap"/"shit"/"fuck."

I am also working on a Marduk dialogue change that will be uploaded when the 910+ pages are public. People may not agree with what I have changed. Big Bad Villain Marduk gave me whiplash...

Anyway... The Spirits granting Rhov/Feaf a child reminds him of how Jahla's species was created. The Gods created them, and Rhov/Feaf rejected a child created by Marduk, only to discover that the Golden (Black???) Lioness had already blessed them. Rhov is scared of what Marduk will do upon finding out that not only is Feaf pregnant, but it's because of an Aedran Spirit. Rhov states it should feel like a blessing, but he is more worried than he is excited.

I probably should have kept Panel 7 and Panel 9 of Page 889, but I had already edited it before I decided against it. Oops.

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Art credits belong to Kique. I will not be sharing any edits from Patreon pages out of respect for the artist

The conversation with the Rabisu (part 2)

I have dialogue edited for Marduk to explain "a great evil", but they will only be posted after they're public.

That's all.