(I put your sprite back into the submission!) -SA World: Alternia
Name: Dolens Fidema (rough translation of “Painful Truth”. Probably butchered it.)
Age: 8 Sweeps.
Theme/Story: you could probably get a “windswept” vibe from him. Obviously an asshole (as a lime who exposes his condemned existence and teases highbloods about it.) (Not an asshole move but… okay? Is there something inherently assholish about an oppressed minority being open about their existence? This forms the core of your character and, how do I put this? It’s not great praxis, friend.) (Also, a character like this would be culled INSTANTLY. Going around with a Lime Class symbol in Lime on Alternia is just asking for a lynching. Your character would never have made it 8 sweeps acting like this.)
Goals: to destabilize the Alternian Government and topple normal society. (This is… not what the Goals section is used for! I will review this as a general review in lieu of other stated goals.) (A troll with this kind of goal needs to be smarter about it. Right now he’s playing like a moron. An Alternian Lime would learn by 2 sweeps that to be open is to die. You need him to be like… Lime Batman.)
Strife Specibus: ScytheKind/FanKind/BluffKind. (Bluff kind being the equivalent of having a water gun that looks too much like a real gun and saying your gonna shoot a friend with it.)
Fetch Modus: Shatter (items can be retrieved from the act of Shattering, from Breaking glass to “Shattering” someone else perception of something) (This is… not how Fetch Modii work. They’re a computer abstraction with a gimmick. They don’t function off of like.. people’s psyches and stuff. Like Jade’s are just a bunch of board games, Dave/Rose/John’s are all programming references, etc.)
Blood Color: Lime
Symbol & Meaning: Canrius. Sign of the Helper
Handle: GenuineBeliever (Of what? Where’s the Hope? Where’s the belief? All you’ve given me is that he’s a tricksy man who messes with people. In fact, the opposite of a believer. If you’re playing a Hope player, you’ve gotta actually, y’know, Hope.)
Quirk:
Special Abilities: Wind Manipulation. (Requires momentum to be effective) (This I’m assuming is from the fan theory that Limes had elemental control powers?)
Luaus/Guardian: a large jackal which constantly nips Dolens when he forgets to feed her, which is only when she is home as she goes out on hunts often
Interests: enjoys Mindgames, not one for jokes but will make one once in awhile, and a major conman (And… that’s it? Your character is Lime Jigsaw? Maybe? No justice? No history? No nothing?)
Personality: unusually kind when you first meet him, obvious asshole. (Why does he always smile? (What does this mean, exactly? Is he obviously saccharine and fake about it? Is he just thoughtless but means well?
Lunar Sway: Derse. Neglect to change even when confronted.
Title: Prince of Hope. This title is meant to force Dolens to change himself and truly see the harm he has done. When he is fully realized, he will be a better person (who wont sell you for a nickel) (This…. is like the opposite class to teach him that. Active classes push a character to do MORE for themselves, and Prince of Hope is like… the exact kind of class to enforce selling your allies out, destroying their hopes and passively restricting their options for survival… This is not the kind of class that makes someone a better person see: Eridan, our Canon Prince of Hope.) (If you want him to be an Active Hope Player, you’d need be pushed towards something like Maid or Knight. Something that actively uses Hope, that forces him to see its power and its necessity.) (I personally recommend something Passive with a heavy Inversion. Rogue specifically- opening the story as a Knight of Rage, taking the ire and the hatred and using it against the highbloods, but learning that you can never go full Berserker, calming down and learning to lead from the front AND the back, pushing the hope and opportunity around for other mutants and oppressed trolls.)
