So your editing the story again? What exactly are you changing. Cause based on your recent reblog I'm worried that it's going to change certain parts of the rewrite and I'd like some conformation on some of the parts being edited if you don't mind? I just love this rewrite and want to know if I am overthinking this or not
Indeed. I was actually making a whole post for it but I’ll write it here. The overall story stays the same just the elements change
Nothing to drastic, there's probably more but here's what I got. (Undercut won't work for me) The clans are now the colonies. Thunder Colony, Shadow Colony, Wind Colony, River Colony, and don’t forget Star Colony. Bloodclan stays Bloodclan however. River Colony and Shadow Colony leaders have -moon instead of star due to their greater connection to the moon. Thunder and Wind keep the -star through. Windclan and Shadowclan apprentices don’t have -paw. Kittens don’t have -kit at the end of their names anymore River and Wind are often Royal leadership. Shadowclan is 50/50 while Thunder is leader-deputy most of the time. I actually added the overseers and messengers finally. Just fixing the lore a bit but nothing to crazy. I also added head royals and pelt-makers are now called craft-claws. I’m working on Chapter 9 of book 3 as I edit. So nothing’s really on hold like last time. Thunder Colony cats wears gold on some part of their body. Thunderclan leaders wear golden necklaces with gems the color of their eyes. Shadow Colony like swearing clothes and other human stuff they can use. They also use bones for decoration and rituals. River Colony loves their gems. Riverclan leaders wear crowns with gems of their eyes. Wind Colony is the most ‘modest’ colony. The few gems they use are for clan culture purposes and nothing more. Traditions: After a new leader receives their lives, they wear a piece of the moonstone for at least two moons to help absorb Star Colony’s power. Thunder Colony apprentices must fight for their warrior names, they sit vigil afterwards. New River Colony warriors go on the Great Night Swim and must return with as much of black fish as proof. Wind Colony apprentices have dandelions on their fur constantly, they shake them off when they complete their training. New Shadow Colony warriors stand guard in the daytime for their vigil.
Minor notes/Family tree: Graypool is now Grayfeather of Wind Colony. Reedfeather demanded at least one of his kits so Gray is in Wind Colony Splashsong, Swanlight, and Morningbreeze are born and Mudfur is still their father, however Morning chose to stay in Windclan while Swan and Splash left. Mudthorn and Emberdawn are now characters. Mudthorn is Mudbelly’s son from a relationship with a kittypet and Emberdawn is now part of the MallowFrog family in the same litter as Moss and Silver. Aged down Lilystem and made her Rippleclaw’s mate. Strikeheart is a RaggedstarxFoxheart kitten. Yes this was purely to spite Yellowfang (Murkfang) Flowerdusk and Tawnywhisker are ThrushpeltxBluestar kittens.
Thunder Colony
Pinestar was the kit of Cloudberry and Oakstar from a political alliance after Ravenwing’s death. Deerdapple is the mother of Doestar and Deerpaw. Doestar is the mother of Rabbitleap who’s the father of Ambershine. Ambershine and Torndust had Redtail and Spottedleaf and adopted Willowpelt around 4 moons. Mistpelt is the mother of Daisytoe. She adopted Blazenose at 1 moon old after a kittypet raid. Pinestar and Blazenose (Flashnose) had Swiftbreeze. Hollypelt and Smallwhisker (Smallear) wanted kits but weren’t in a relationship. Fuzzypelt was the result of this. Larksong and Flamenose are the parents of Sunstar and Featherwhisker. Beetail is the father of Squirrelwhisker who with Eaglestorm are the parents of Windflight and Woollytail. Petaltail is the mother of Stormtail and Stonepelt. Smallear and Rockfall are littermates. Harepounce and Stagleap had Speckletail. Tawnyspots and Rainfur had Thrushpelt. Tawnyspots got with Leopardfoot and had Miststrike, Nightshade, and Tiger-roar. Swiftbreeze, Adderfang, and Littlestep had Patchpelt and Leopardfoot. Sweetbriar and Shrewpounce (oc) are the parents of Fallowsong who is the mother of Poppydawn. Poppydawn and Windflight had Sweetheart and Thistleclaw, Rosetail was adopted into the family at 1 moon old. Sunstar and Speckletail had Goldenflower and Lionheart. Sparrowpelt and White-eye had Birchstep and Mousefur. Dappletail and Stormtail had Featherstone and Cricket-throat as their first litter and Fogtail as their second litter. Robin and Nutmeg joined Thunder Colony at 9 moons old and were apprenticed to Thrushpelt and Bluemoon respectively. Bluemoon and Thistleclaw had Mossthorn and Buzzkit (who died of greencough.) Bluemoon and Thrushpelt had Flowerdusk and Tawnywhisker. Archeye and Willowpelt had Darkstripe and Lightpaw. RobinRoseFuzzyPatch had Chestnutclaw, Dustpelt, Cherrycloud, and Raveneye. The little group adopted Fogtail prior through. Redtail and Birchstep had Sandstorm and Sparrowpaw (killed by greencough). Brindleface joined the relationship and they had Thymeroot and Rootpaw. Mossthorn had a fling with a kittypet named Joel and had Embereyes as the first litter and Cinderfreeze and Smokefur as the second litter. Thrushpelt and Featherwhisker wanted kits and Willowpelt offered as a surrogate and they had Graystripe and Cranewing. Sweetheart and Patchpelt had Seedspots. Frostbite and Lionheart had Brackenfur, Lichenstrike, Thornpaw, and Brightpaw. Willowpelt had a fling with Tornear and had Smoke, Rose, Ebony, and Owl.
Shadow Colony
Stonetooth is the father of Crowtail and Archeye. Crowtail and Darkwing (Mousewing) had Clawface and Nightpelt. Archeye and Willowpelt had Darkstripe and Lightpaw (who was killed by wolves). Archeye and Hollyflower had Stonesnap and Barktail. Clawface and Rowanberry had Cinderfur and Toadpelt (Stumpytail). Nightpelt had Darkflower and Frogtail. Amberleaf had Brackenfoot. Barkleap (Deerleap) had Mudfoot. Littlebird and Lizardfang had Lizardstripe. Cedarstar and Featherstorm are littermates. Featherstorm had a fling with Hal and had Raggedmoon and Scorchfang. Silverflame and Redthistle had Blazeflower. Blazeflower and Brackenfoot had Yellowfang as their first litter and Rowanberry and Nutwhisker as their second litter. Hollyflower met a kittypet named Black and had Flintfang, Fernshade, and Blackfoot. Toadskip and Nettlespot had Wolfstep and Foxheart. Then Poolcloud joined the relationship and they had Cloudpelt and Littlekit. Marshshadow and Cloudpelt had Whitethroat. Lizardstripe and Mudfoot (Mudclaw) had Barkfoot (Deerfoot), Tangleburr, and Palecloud (Runningnose) as their first litter. Lizardkit and Cedarkit as their second litter. Whitemoss (OC) had Blizzardwing and Sagewhisker. Blizzardwing and Featherstorm had Dawncloud as their first litter, Vole and Moss as their second litter, Sage as their third. Ashclaw and Dustspots (Oc) had Newtspeck and Gravelheart (Ash-heart). Newtspeck and Barkfoot had Wetfoot, Brownwhisker, and Littlecloud. Tangleburr had Appletooth and Poppytail. Dawncloud and Finchflight have Swamp, Elm, Bog, and Blossom.
Wind Colony
Palebird and Leafshine are sisters, daughters of Whiteberry and Rootsong (OC). Pale and Leaf were the couple’s late in life litter. Redclaw is the son of Flamepelt. Heatherstar and Highbreeze (OC) had Hawkheart and Lilywhisker. Lilywhisker and Crowfur had Deadfoot. Hawkheart and Lakefur (OC) had Mudfur. Sandgorse and Dawnstripe are kits of Sunleap and Hazelpelt. Palebird and Sandgorse had Duskstar. Palebird later got with Woollytail and had Wrenflight, Flysnap, Bristleclaw, and Rabbit-tail. Dawnstripe had Appledawn. Plumclaw had Darkfoot. Meadowslip and Hickorynose had Sorrelflight and Pigeonwing. MeadowHickoryCrow happened so Sorrel, Pigeon, and Dead see each other as siblings. Stagleap is not related to Doespring or Ryestalk, However, Doe and Rye are littermates since Mousemist (Mistmouse) and Hareflight are their parents. Duskstar and Barkface adopted Ashfoot around 3 moons. Ashfoot and Deadfoot don’t see each other as family and weren’t raised to. Cloudrunner and Aspenfall had Whitetail and Webfoot. Ryestalk had a fling with Marshcloud and had Runningbrook. Larkfoot (Larksplash) and Grasstail had Morningflower as their first litter and Thrushwing and Stoneclaw as their second litter. Wrenflight and Stagleap had Weasel and Hare
River Colony
Darkmoon (Darkstar) is the mother of Reedmoon. Appledusk is the son of Applescale and Volemoon. Hailstep and Echomist are the parents of Beetlestrike, Voleclaw, and Petalstream. Cedarpelt and Marshcloud are littermates. Suneyes and Frogleap are littermates and their parents are Lakeshine and Cedarpelt. Suneyes and Beetlestrike had Vixenleap and Grasswhisker. Shellmoon and Brambleberry are littermates Duskwater and Troutclaw had Rainflower. Dawnscale and Mallowtail are littermates and their parents are Softwing and Owfur. Whitefang and Softwing are littermates. Shimmerpelt and Piketooth had Blackclaw and Skyeyes. Blackclaw and Dawnscale had Rippleclaw and Whiteclaw. Ottersplash and Timberfur had Reedtail, Sedgecreek, and Mudbelly. Mudbelly had Mudthorn with an unknown dam. Greenflower was taken into the clan at 8 moons old. Storm-moon and Bluestar had Mistyfoot and Stonefur. Storm-moon had Willowheart, Minnowpool, and Silverstream with Willowbreeze. Frogleap and Mallowtail had Otterstep (Heavystep) as their first litter, Silvertide, Emberdawn, and Mosspelt as their second litter.