4. Share a sentence or paragraph from your writing that you’re really proud of (explain why, if you like) - dramaticsnakes
In Millennia chapter 00001111 (15), I wanted to show Virgil rediscovering music, as I was inspired by Terrence for Virgil’s character--I had watched some of the videos be was in with Thomas and had listened to “Birds” on repeat for a good chunk of time before I started writing the fic. I was so nervous writing him in, but I love his voice so much that I just had to.
I am most proud of the entire section when I described him singing!
“And the song continued, faster, bumpy, like rolling hills. Each word falling into the next, like dancing footsteps. The song rose, the intensity buzzing in his chest. And then it simmered down, letting the resonance waft in the air like steam from a hardy stew.”
Admittedly, that last metaphor is a bit odd, but I loved the comparison to the music to rolling hills and dancing footsteps.
Incorporating song into a story is difficult, and I often don’t get the same feelings when I just see lyrics and stuff. So I really wanted to describe what the music was like, and what it meant to Virgil.
This whole chapter was really neatly structured too. There is this conflict between Virgil’s taste of freedom and the restraints imposed upon him by Dei’dra.
This point in the story was integral to understanding Virgil’s goals and aspirations too. And also was an instance of him adapting and adopting aspects of the universe outside his home planet, and finding similarities and joy in a seemingly dark and hostile universe from his perspective.
