#lilytellsitlikeitis

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Lily Hudson

My art currently looks at environments, specifically how physical and digital environments co-exist. Themes of feminine identity, socioeconomic environments, and science fiction all feature in my work, with the sci-fi elements specifically lending a lot of the aesthetic and references that substantiate my work. Science in general has become an important part of my work, with some of the theories that exist in science being completely misinterpreted to create alternative ways of viewing the world, for example, my series “How to Remove Yourself From Time using the Second Law of Thermodynamics” explored how time is so under defined in the fundamental laws of physics, and how this lack can help us to redefine how time as a principle functions. Material wise, my work involves a lot of traditional “women’s work”, from crochet to embroidery and material manipulation, or traditional art techniques like painting. However, recently it has been spanning outwards to include Photoshop, coding and website design; as well as low-fi sculpture. The combination of these themes and materials come together to create environments that feel intimate, with the viewer’s presence becoming a intrusion into my inner thoughts.

http://www.lilyart.co.uk/

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Critiquing a Critique Paper

Lately, all of the papers submitted by my students are poorly written. I’m not really much of a grammar nazi, though I do understand that grammar plays a big role when it comes to evaluating critique papers... but the most important ingredient in a successful critique paper is this:

COHERENCE.

What’s so sad about it is that my students happen to be in college already... so they should know how to write, right?

Unfortunately, they don’t. Their teachers in Creative Writing must be lenient in checking their papers. Though I do understand their plight (imagine going through three sections’ worth of papers), it is also the duty of the person who gave the assignment to give feedback.

Take a look at the most recent paper I checked:

Now tell me, did that look like a critique paper to you?

It’s hopeless. Clearly, the student rushed her homework. No spelling corrections were made, and the grammar’s just outrageous. Her thoughts were all over the place. Some points were left unfinished and the flow is non-existent. Overall, this student neglected to satisfy my curiosity about the paper her classmates presented in class.

And yes, I told my students to give an academic paper using the academic format. Obviously, neglecting to submit a good paper would affect a huge chunk of the writer’s grade.

Believe it or not, this is not the only person in my class who produced shit like this. AND IT’S SO SAD BECAUSE I KNOW THEY CAN DO BETTER.

Maybe they’re too preoccupied with their own lives, I mean, they’d rather go do other things than write a paper. But it wouldn’t hurt to try to show me effort that they understood what they’re writing about, right?

Maybe they couldn’t write in English well, but I’m not looking at grammar. I just want to see content and coherence in their paper, is that so bad?

Papers like these also make me doubt myself, if they truly are learning in my class. Or if they like me as a teacher, you know?

But I guess that’s a topic for another day. I still have a lot of papers to check.