Interim Synthesis - Peer Grading
Comments on my interim synthesis from our peer grading session:
1. What is the text about? Is its basic message clear? The text covers the concept of the decisive moment, as elaborated by Henry Cartier-Bresson and relates the chosen image to this concept. The message is clear.
2. How well is the text organised? Do the paragraphs follow logically from one to the next? Good flow and structure however the large descriptive segment breaks the flow of the personal opinion. It would be better to blend opinion and description better and write smaller paragraphs.
3. How well-researched is the text? Has the author looked at other books and articles to form their argument? It's somewhat sufficient. Could b used more extensively. The poem does contribute to the analysis, but the text requires additional academic sources (book, article, etc.).
4. Has the referencing system been followed properly? No in-text citation. Brings down value of research. Bibliography must be alphabetical (authors last name).
5. Does the text include both analysis and description? Please comment on the balance between these two elements? Yes, good balance between analysis and description. Pay attention to the structure of the text. Divide paragraphs clearly to emphasise analysis/description.
6. What has the author done well? -Style is clear -Develops quotes well -Gives good personal opinion (sometimes a little much)
7. What needs improving? -Paragraphs need to be more concise, shorter -Refrain from giving too much personal opinion
Overall, from my peer grading it seems as though there were no major problems with my writing style or content. The only issues seem to be in my referencing and possibly the structure but these are things which can be easily worked on. The session was useful as I was faced with other writing styles and in turn was able to reflect on my own.
