Potential Script Idea for comic #1
Hello! I plan to do a couple practice comics depicting random events from my story. I'm posting the script for these scenes for people to give their thoughts before I get into it. Any feedback is helpful, weather it be stuff you hated, enjoyed, or felt nothing about.
All characters belong to me.
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Sc. 1: Under Fire
The scene opens up on a wide shot of a small village surrounded by a protective wall made of wood and stone. The village is on top of a steep hill, and a few yards from the base is a shoreline. Small boats are situated at the edge of the water and a large group of pirates are beginning to climb the hill, intent on attacking. A large pirate ship is also approaching, cannons pointed at the town. It's currently twilight, and the weather is clear. Vlad is standing on top of the wall, looking down at the approaching invaders. He's soon joined by Phoenix, who apparently decided to park core her way up her.
Phoenix: Ay, Vlad!
Vlad: Holy shi-! Oh, hey Nix. You're just in time for the fucking shit show.
P: So, what we dealing with?
V: Oh, you know, an entire army of pirates that's probably bigger than this entire fucking town.
P: Cool! Where is everybody? I know ms.Jellyfish and her super villain hubby are dealing with the mess in the plaza, but weren't there other mercenaries apart from us?
V: Yeeeaahh, you're gonna love this. Somebody apparently decided that this was a wonderful time to send most of the other mercenaries on missions to deal with the imaginary hoard of slimes that are apparently infesting the forest outside the damned town.
P: .... well shit.
V: Yup.
P: Okay.... got any ideas? Plans? Battle strategies?
V: Let's see.... there's two of us, four if Missi and Trix manage to show up, and I'm going to say a couple million of them. We can wait for Missi and Trix to show up, or we can just jump in now. We're screwed either way. At this point, it's just a matter of how far you feel like getting fucked up the ass.
P:.... Wow! Thanks, mr sunshine and rainbows! Good to know that I can always depend on you to make a situation seem worse than it actually is!
V: Well, it's true! With how close they are, we're going to have to do something, otherwise they're going to tear down the wall! And then everybody's going to be screwed! You can not tell me tha-
P: Ah, hold it right there, dark and broody. What if I just set everybody on fire?
V: Um, the fire could spread up here, and you'd kill everyone. Also, they have a cannon. Let me just point that out.
P: Soooo, if I took out the cannon, and their ships, they'd loose their cannon, and probably a lot of their supplies...
V: Oh, and are you going to fucking teleport over there?
P: No, but you could.
V:.... Fuck no.
P: Ugh, Vlad! You're thinking about this like we're gonna die as soon as we step out there! We've done worse! And if we die... well, at least we won't be alive, so Chronos won't be able to rip our heads off.
V:True.
P: Also, who says we're the ones getting fucked? I dunno about you, and I kind of don't give a shit, but trust me, those shits aren't gonna be walking after this! No lube, no foreplay, right in there, and I'm shoving my metaphorical dick-
V: I get the picture, Nix! Please stop!
P: And come on. We're gonna have to get out there anyway! Otherwise-
*a cannon ball is fired, and it sails over their heads, landing in the far side of the town. A loud yell from a pirates fills the air*
P: .... Get me over there, and I'll light their ships up like.... like... I dunno, like-
V: Ugh, damn it all. Nix?
P: Yeah?
V: Let's go fuck some pirates.
