Apr 22
poolside music practice
Version one is superior, because Jughead is not cognizant of events just transpired. The last cord "with feeling" comes from the sound of Mr. Lodge smashing the guitar through Archie. Version two pulls in a bunch of narration -- the punchline of small improvements measured by more reserved violence needs to be firmly placed in an unusual frame of reference to understand. I do not understand the desire to change this one.