I came across a LB fanfic recently where David was wanting this one girl to add to the pack, but in order to do so he had to lure her best friend in. Her best friend was turned undead and became the group slut and she went crazy. David's target still doesn't have any idea what's going on. The story's well written grammatically, but I don't see any of the boys going so far for any one person who isn't a genuine, wanted member or keeping an unstable vampire. Am I alone in thinking this?
Hmm, you know I try to stay away from these only because I usually end up saying something I shouldn’t in a review. It’s a shame that it’s well written but doesn’t suit your needs or the movies it sounds like. I’m a little confused as to why David had to use this best friend to lure this person in though and yet turns the friend first? I’m really not sure why she’s become the groups sex slave either, from what it sounds like. I don’t believe any of the boys would have need to share a girl when there is plenty out there, nor do I believe they would have to use force to get one into their group if done right. I mean they all work together as a pack in the movie and I think people are naturally drawn to them. I’m not sure why she’s gone crazy though? Is she a toy to them? If she were it would make more sense, but then in the end I would so no reason for them to keep her around, even as one of their own. She would be mentally unstable and no amount of vampire blood, in my opinion would help that. Most likely, if Max were involved, he would step in and put a stop to it. An unstable vampire would endanger the entire pack and there isn’t anything David or the other boys could do to stop him. I would step away from this story if I were you. But thank you for sharing. I don’t mind discussing this at all. :-)
