I had so many notes. Now I'm blanking in excitement.
Okay. Firstly well goddamn done on your rewrite. Like I said I'm shocked you could make something that good already even better.
1. The beginning blew me away. There was alot of new internal dialog and it actually made me feel so much for MC.
2. Thank you for the extra RO interaction and longer scenes.
3. Still love that Arlo and Eddie stand off.
4. Omg Eddie and Amelia's new scenes were sooo great. Nearly exploded with Eddie's and Amelia's was actually just slightly bittersweet.
Going on that little quest and meeting Sam was interesting. Okay I'm like seriously trying to not give away too many spoilers.
All in all point is.. I loved the rewrite. I was already inlove with the original demo but you've actually made it better which is again... insane to me! Really well done. Omg I can't wait to continue on this journey. So hard to choose an RO 😭♥️
I wanted to keep this ask for myself and hug it tight ❤️
1. Something I felt was missing from the original was more info on the MC and their past. Especially bc I like envisioned certain stuff happening which affects how MC reacts to some things and then never told the reader those events. So now I’m trying to sprinkle them in.
4. I’m so excited, I have both characters development much more clearly outlined in my head now.
You might meet Sam again! (You will, if you visited him)