Rewrite: Sonic YAAU - ch 3
I’m currently re-structuring my story about the Sonic gang in their young adulthood. When I came across this chapter, I HAD to rewrite it. I felt like in the original chapter, Shadow and Amy were out of character.
I’d love to get some feedback.
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“Come on. I’ll take you home.”
“Huh?”
“You’re exhausted. You should get some rest.”
Amy Rose nodded at him, agreeing. Even though she still was unable to reflect on the entire situation, let alone reflect on how she was feeling right now.
Shadow knelt next to her on the grass and lifted her up in his arms.
Her body felt a little heavy and numb and she only watched him to let this situation happen the way that it did.
“Work with me, okay?” he said while he was trying to lift her.
The muscles in his arms tightened.
“What?”
He sighed when he looked at her face and concluded she had no clue at all what he was talking about.
His sense of responsibility came up when Amy subsided in the grass and it sharpened his senses.
“Never mind. Pull your arms around me and hold on tight.”
“Okaaay.”
He dashed off into the distance with a high speed that she was used to because Sonic ran with her in his arms this fast many times before, but this… This was different.
This time, there was no threat from an enemy to fight against like the many, many times in the past with Sonic.
Shadow’s movement was fairly smooth as he dashed through the endlessly seeming dark night sky and the cold night breeze cooled her heated body.
It was like she was dreaming. Everything felt so serene: the starry skies, the quiet calm of the night, the speed they were traveling at.
She found herself oddly drawn to him.
His smell, the lines that formed his silhouette and that attitude of him that made him so mysterious…
Amy caught herself on the urge to break through the wall he built up and had felt like that for a long time.
She just couldn’t stand it that anyone wouldn’t want to be friends with her, whoever it may be.
She always tried to be friendly to others and not only sometimes Amy pushed too far in attempt to get close to them.
Whilst pondering she played a little with his chest fur.
I can feel his heartbeat..
Slowly she shifted her gaze to look at him.
The warmth of his breath while exhaling created small damp clouds against the cold of the night that vanished as quickly as they had appeared.
“Your heart rate is fast.”
“Needless to say under the circumstances.” He calmly stated, eyes uninterruptedly focussed on the path before him. But while he seemed calm on the outside, his heartbeat sped up.
“It’s increasing.” She whispered.
He rolled his eyes at her.
“Because you’re making me feeling highly uncomfortable.” He hissed and placed her back on her own two feet, having arrived at her house.
“And why do you think that is?”
…
“Because you ran a couple of miles with me in your arms?” Amy guessed when she grew impatient.
“But I’m not out of breath, now am I?”
Amy thought about it: his condition was so good, he’d barely ever run out of breath.
Suddenly it hit her.
“Might it be… me?” She asked almost inaudible.
He looked away from her and remained silent, cheeks reddening instantly and shoulders stiffening.
“Shadow?”
“You should get some rest, Amy.”
Shadow let the chilly breeze cool down his flustered muzzle and scratched his squills in discomfort. Amy grasped his hands and thereby forced him to look at her.
“I want you to stay.”
Suddenly they both felt stone cold sober again.
“I can’t.”
“Why?”
“Just because.”
“That’s not good enough, Shadow. Give me a proper reason.”
“Amy, you’re drunk and I feel like I’ve drank too much as well. I can’t… you know? It’s not right.”
“You’re the one who kissed me in the first place!”
The agitation in her voice rose.
“Yeah, I’m sorry about that.”
“You’re sorry?!” – she questioned in dismay, volume of her voice running up.
“Listen, Shadow, I don’t want to force you to come with me if that’s not what you want, but I don’t believe you don’t want to. We don’t have to… I mean… I’m not asking you to… sleep with me.”
“Of course you’re not!” He blunted at her.
Neither of them spoke.
Time seemed frozen and her head spun a little.
It was like she had a fever, flushing from hot to cold and back again. She then realized what it was and gagged.
“Blast!”
Amy rushed inside to make it in time for the bathroom and was followed by Shadows footsteps.
How inconvenient to follow me at this time.
But there wasn’t enough time for her to shout to leave her alone.
The door stayed closed though until the sound the doorknob disturbed the one of the flushing toilet and running water she rinsed her face with.
“You all right?”
He put a hand on her back and softly rubbed it.
Looking up to him, her face was dripping, her eyes prickly and red.
He grabbed a towel for her, but found his attempts to dry her face for her were interrupted.
“Give me that.”
She took it from him, took a seat on the edge of the bathtub and sighed when she observed herself in the mirror. She felt horrible and now also looked it.
“Sorry. That wasn’t necessary. I just wished that you didn’t have to see me like this.”
“I don’t mind.”
For a minute she wanted to protest, insulted by the insinuation that he didn’t mind her feeling sick, but then swallowed it. Knowing him, this was probably a poor choice of words and maybe it meant that he wasn’t disturbed by this side of her. It didn’t drive him away.
Amy freshened herself up a little and flushed her mouth with eucalyptus-flavoured mouthwash to rid herself of the bad taste of vomit.
Shadow leaned against the tiled wall of her bathroom in silence, eyeing her in discretion.
“Shadow, why did you kiss me tonight?”
“We hit the glass too hard.” He raised one eyebrow and smirked at her.
“You’re avoiding my question. Try again, hedgehog.”
“I gues… You’re pleasant to be around. I seem to enjoy your company lately. I didn’t mean for it to happen.”
“Honestly? I didn’t notice until tonight.”
“I knew you didn’t. I’m sorry for kissing you out of the blue… but when you returned my gestures…”
“It’s okay. I like spending time with you as well.”
“Okay you say.”
He sounded somewhat disappointed.
“Until tonight, I never really thought about you like this, but suddenly there was this tension…”
“I already told you: we both drank too much.”
“Not that!”
In a gust she closed in on him.
Chaos, she smelled great!
“Let me try something here.”
She then slowly closed in on his face, her hot breath provoking just enough sensation to call it ticklish on his lips.
She softly kissed them, pressing her body against him smoothly.
He spontaneously forgot how to breathe for a second and let an ‘wow’ escape his lips, followed by a chuckle.
“What?!”
“Nothing.” Shadow whispered in between a breath to place his hands behind her back to kiss her again- with more confidence this time.
He now eagerly kissed her lips, leaving her longing for more of him.
Playing with his chestfur again, Amy worked her lips down to his jawline and neck, her fingertips firmly alongside the quills on his back.
She noticed his breathing became irregular and could feel his heartrate increase again.
Just when she wondered if the tension would push them to take a next step, he opened his mouth:
“Amy…”
“Huh?”
“Let’s go sleeping for now.”
An almost inaudible ‘oh’ escaped her lips.
“Let’s take things slow. I want to treat you with the respect you deserve. And that means that we have to stop right here, not in the last place because you look exhausted and I have to admit: even I’m beat.”
“Even you?”
“Even me.”
She smiled at him. Feeling playful, she couldn’t stop herself from kissing him again, but he was quick to break away from it.
“Stop that.”
His smile vanished, expression replaced with the blank she was used to, even though on the inside he was smug that she couldn’t stop herself from kissing him.
“You’re so disciplined!”
“Stop teasing me. We need to get some rest.”
“You’re secretly such a gentleman.”
“Don’t tell anyone, though.”
She giggled.
“I’ll carry you upstairs.”
He put her in bed, pulled the blankets over her to pet her forehead and turned around to leave the bedroom.
He kept amazing her with the uncommon way he acted sometimes. It intrigued her.
“I’ll sleep on the couch.”
“Bu-“
“Amy, I’m in the military. I sleep in odd places all the time. I think I can handle your couch.”
“At least know where the blankets are, you stubborn hedgehog.” She said while handing one to him.
“Thanks. Sweet dreams.”
“You too.”