[apocryphics]

but! we! cannot! simply! sit! and! stare! at! our! wounds! forever!

[tinywoot]

NEVER date someone for 3-4 years because then you'll break up and it will break ur heart into millions of pieces, you won't be able to sleep, eat or basically function anymore.

[allsadnshit]

YOU MUST PICTURE YOURSELF HEALED AND BETTER

[tinywoot]

I'm so so scared. There's a possibility that I'm pregnant and I am freaking out about it. I can't sleep. i have been researching all kinds of pills and i don't know how I'm going to be dealing w it IF in case it comes true

[tinywoot]

i had this feeling that he might be seeing someone. like I had a really real feeling that he might be and i got so anxious. i wish I was with him. i wish things were different and we were together.

[tinywoot]

how do people go from planning to spend their whole lives together to not talking to each other at all. i hate this feeling so much. i miss him.

[givemearmstopraywith]

there's laundry to do and a genocide to stop by vinay krishnan

[tinywoot]

there's no need to make the genocide about you. it's such a shit ass "poem"

[nitrosplicer]

Feedback, since OP is challenging people to critique the poem, and I’m fine with that: the line about batteries seems dissonant to the social issues you mention earlier. Perhaps choose a different metaphor. It feels chosen at random. The assonance doesn’t work because “dissonance” and “batteries” do not utilize the same diphthong and the soft hiss of “dissonance” is at odds with the sharp consonants of “batteries.”

The repetitive structure of “I think I think I think” is not effective, since it is not used in a manner pertaining to a form. If repetition is used in a poem, it should be used meaningfully.

The use of the first line being repeated for the beginning and the end is not effective in conveying emotion: only the fifth line deals with the genocide of Palestinians. By the end of the poem, I feel frustration and not sympathy with the speaker. If you repeat the first and last line, why do we care about your laundry?

Overwhelmingly, the poem deals with mundane things which pale in comparison to the fifth line, which is for me, the most effective part of the poem.

I would ask the writer, what is the dominant emotion of this poem meant to be? If you were trying to show being overwhelmed as an emotion, repeating the first line and the final line is ineffective if you want the reader to feel overwhelmed too. Right now, it’s too organized, as if you’re running down a to-do list, which means that this speaker comes across as more callous than you may intend.

[tinywoot]

I won't critique the poem's technical aspects since your expertise in English, evidenced by your PhD, surpasses mine. However, my primary worry is that Gaza is often misrepresented as mere material for poetry or literature. The people of Gaza endure real suffering and hunger, and writing about personal feelings doesn't necessarily offer genuine support. It can be perceived as insensitive. Artists should grasp the reality of the situation.

[givemearmstopraywith]

there's laundry to do and a genocide to stop by vinay krishnan

[tinywoot]

there's no need to make the genocide about you. it's such a shit ass "poem"

[tinywoot]

i wish i had someone to help me decide what to do

[tinywoot]

do i stay or leave?

[radfemblack]

Responses to this moronic silencing tactic 👇🏾

[tinywoot]

feeling lots of anger today

[ashstfu]

january 2022 keeps testing me like im mentally stable or something

[kafk-a]

Katherine Mansfield, from The Collected Letters of Katherine Mansfield: Volume 5

[slayiconicgirlbossqueen]

Hi hello I’d like to discuss the judges who give rapists light sentences, who let them off for sex crimes, who say weird sympathetic (but probably more empathetic) things to them etc. because that has to be one of the most enabling things in rape culture imo

Men see the actions and decisions of those judges and are sent a clear message: they can probably get away with it too if that guy did.

I think there should be more public pressure from feminists and also just decent people who are disgusted by rape to get these judges out of their positions and be investigated. Again, it’s got to be one of the big things that enables rapists. Seems like all those judges are pleaing the fifth every time they let a guy go, give him a very small amount of jail time, show them sympathy/empathy etc. Like this is actually a network of rapists/rapist sympathizers systematically allowing men to essentially get away with rape or to get away with it with little to no repercussions? Kill them all

[tinywoot]

remembering the time a man (who was a rape convict) was given bail and the reason judge gave was that he was an "asset" to the country.

[tinywoot]

i wish i were dead so many fucking emotions i hate it here

[tinywoot]

i wish i wasnt like im rn