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WTL:Revision Strategies

“By pushing aside any emphasis on music education while our students are young, we are telling them that music is not important.”

By disregarding a music education as secondary to all other subjects, students worldwide are losing sight of the importance in music studies, which have proven to be valuable fields of studies for children and adults alike. After re-seeing this passage, I think about expanding on the public view given to music education following its being ignored.

WTL: Recollections

What stuck with my reader was the effect of music education on state test scores. My reader was most interested in how learning instruments can affect other course works scores.

WTL: Project 4

I plan on using Option #2 for Project 4. Option two is the options to change my essay into a multimedia platform in order to expand the audience. I plan on doing this because it will broaden my essay to wider audiences and have visual mediums that can help deliver my message. It will also help me portray my facts and background data in a more direct and effective way.

WTL: Activity 2

My essay is about music education in America; specifically for younger students. I feel my essay was left open ended as I had intended because it can lead to a new piece of writing with the same train of thought, except exploring older generations of students as well as more social/cultural approach instead of pure academics. My essay followed a fairly rigid structure as I kept this variation on my argument into a simply school themed structure, and did not explore beyond effects on academics.

WTL: Activity 1

My final draft of P3 focused heavily on how music effects academics, while I wish I would have followed students developments as individuals more. I spoke a little about how they help students learn social skills, and that is a train of thought I wish I had more time to explore. Children can definitely benefit academically from music education, but they can also learn to develop their identity and many social abilities and habits as well.

WTL: Joseph Harris Response

One thing I found interesting about Harris’s article was the idea of marking specific sentences that engage the reader more, and to reposition them to give them a greater affect. I found this intriguing because I had never previously thought of using that particular method to grab reader attention, and it opens a new door in retaining readers.

WTL Active Voice

Passive: It could have been a direct cognitive connection they learned to realize after extensive training to meaning through music.

Active: The direct connection was prevalent after extensive musical training. Passive: Music programs have much to offer elementary age kids, from improvement in test scores, hearing abilities, math skills and teamwork. Active: Music programs offer students the opportunity to improve their test scores, hearing abilities, math skills and social skills.

WTL: Revision

I revised my paper after the workshop by rereading and directly applying edits throughout the entire paper. I used my peer reviews to continue reflecting deeper on my subject before narrowing down my audience. However, overall I feel I do not have a very effective revision stage. Commonly after papers I look back and find simple things I missed prior to turning in. I wish to continue establishing an effective editing process to further the quality of my papers.

WTL: Logical Fallacies

“We will not acknowledge President Obama’s Superme Court nominee because it is not his right to appoint a new Justice. We should wait until he has been replaced by someone voted in by the American people. Because only the President can nominate someone worthwhile.” OR “We can’t trust this reporter will remain unbiased about the city council election because she has a Bernie Sanders bumper sticker”

WTL: Thesis

Being musically educated can have benefits beyond the use of an instrument, Students cause skills learned from musical training to improve in areas such as mathematics, language and behavioral tendencies. The benefits of a music education are hard to ignore, and should be implemented in schools nationwide in order to help improve student learning processes.

WTL 4.5

Through my current research, I can begin to answer my research question. However, my answer to the research question would not be as developed as I would like as of yet, and I will continue to refine the answer as I gather more sources. I do have a firm opinion regarding my topic. I believe that music and the arts holds a positive impact on education and development and my research has only supported this as of yet. I might make the claim “music is a necessary contributor to an education process” should my research continue to support that.

Article 2

The thesis statement of “The Arts and Academic Achievement: What Evidence Shows” is that a link between the arts and academic success is present. The source discuses the importance of art in cultures, how we view the cultures from afar and how those impact history. They discuss how the arts are important to the schooling system and should not have to be justified to maintain their status. The paper is trying to make the claim of importance on the arts in education.

WTL: Taking Stock

The situation I have described is music and artistic influence on an education. This topic is important to me because I have had to listen to dozens of others (primarily middle aged adults) tell me that my time spent playing an instrument or practicing art forms is impeding my school work and is a “waste of time”. I believe the opposite is true, that the arts have a positive impact of student achievement, academic and social. On a larger scale, this affects the arts in society as a whole. By ignoring the value of music at a young age we are teaching the future generations that art is worthless and by extension so is self expression and individuality. If we remove these aspects of expression and work from our community we risk losing parts of humanity, and can leave doors open for unsavory paths. By having a hole left in musics place, I worry community members will resort to less contribution methods that are not have a good impact on society. For now, most people have ignored arguments against the arts, but that isn’t enough. By staying passive on this issue we are allowing the arts to be stripped away piece by piece. It is time to do more.

HW: Annotation prep

After revising my research topic to fit the question “How does music benefit a higher education” I have since found two separate academic papers. Both of these sources connect inherently to each other as they discuss the previous studies on academic achievement and student social capabilities. Through previous experiencing through this topic I know the capabilities of musical influence on academics, however it is interesting reading it in a journal, simply because most general public where I grew up refuses to believe that such a connection exist. This topic is causing me to think on a deeper level on how the mechanics of music effect their students, and wonder about how human development might influence styles.

Research Question

Does a post-secondary education hold benefits to the country as a whole? Is getting an education going to be worth the cost/ a good investment? Does a college education help minorities and underprivileged students succeed?

HW: P3 Brainstorming

I have been thinking about covering changing public perception on higher education for Project 3 because I feel the changing views on the importance of a college education have been drastic and concerning. The number of Americans who believe that a college education is “worthless” or “ a waste of time” can cause a negative effect on the overall outcome of the country as we face having an uneducated population. By confronting these changing perceptions we can begin to understand why people are changing their minds on the issue at hand, as well as how we can cause change for the better.

P2 organization

Make a list of the headings you plan to use in your proposal. Environmental Dangers, Energy has negative effects. My audience needs to know the immediate effects on the local ecosystem by pollution and car emissions. TBC.

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