Hey! When I write I usually wind up making it more dark than intended. How do I add comic relief and/or know when to add it?
As someone who consistently finds their writing darker than intended (or even imagined), I understand the struggle of finding a way to lighten up the mood a little bit.Â
When it comes to comedic relief, here are a few ways to incorporate it in your writing:
The comedic relief character or moment:
- A serious character makes a sarcastic comment that is taken literally
 âYes, you should definitely jump off the bridge.â
 âWell, if you say soââ
 âThe hell? Noâstop!â
- A literal comment is taken as sarcastic/joking
 âIf you hit that button, the entire room will explodeâ
*rolls eyes*Â âYou mean this button?â
- Characters who blurt out whatever they are thinkingÂ
Could be a curse word coming from a character who never curses
 Blurting out something embarrassing
- Have a character get their words mixed upÂ
Think of sound-alike words: they say âCherryâ instead of âFerryâ or something.Â
 Calling a rifle a âboom stickâ or something: this can happen if your character speaks a different language, or is from a different place, or fumbles with their words a lot
- Insert an inappropriate response that makes the reader giggleÂ
Someone proposes, and a character starts choking on their wineÂ
The villain threatens to kill them, and the hero holds up a hand and yawns
 Speeding away from a bank robbery when a character pokes their head from the back seat and announces, âWait, weâre missing Tony!â
 Anything to create that, âYouâve got to be kidding me!â moment
- Introduce a blunt character to a sensitive topic or person
âYour face is blazing red.â
*Clamping hands on face* âW-what? Oh, sorry, I justâŠâÂ
âDid you confess your love to him?â
*Eyes opening wide, going even redder*
*Enter romantic interest, having heard everything*Â âSorry, what?â
- Likewise, have a sensitive character navigate around a blunt topic
âListen. When someone asks you how they look⊠you canât just say they look like a bloated toad.â
*looking confused*Â âSo Iâm expected to lie?â
*Swallowing hard* âYouâre, uh⊠no, not lie exactly⊠just be nicer?â
- Create a massive misunderstanding between characters
 âI thought you said you were pregnant!â
 âI wasnât talking about me!
- When a character is oblivious to the obvious
âSo⊠explain to me again just what happened.â
*pulling hair out of head*Â âDid you not just see the explosion?!â
âSo thatâs what that was!â
 - The unexpected comment from the smart aleck characterÂ
I always think of El Dorado when Tulio and Miguel are adrift at sea with no supplies and no land in sight:
âTulio, did you ever imagine it would end like this?â
âThe horse is a surprise.â
Utilize humourous language:
This can be in the form of:
 An unexpected metaphor or simileÂ
 Click here for more ideas!
Make the situation funny:
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To release the tension in your writing
If you want to lighten up your writing (if you personally feel like its too dark, depressing, gory, or some of your readers feel it necessary)
To remind readers that there is a light at the end of the tunnel
To give the reader some reliefÂ
When comedy hurts: Click here
If youâre writing about a serious/heavy topic (illness, injury, abuse, rape, assault, life flashing before the eyes, etc.), inserting comedy can take away from the gravity/seriousness of the situation
Comedy can undermine the credibility of a character, making them appear less threatening. If you want a villain who gives nightmares, leave the comedy out
Comedy can also make your character look like a jerk. If you have someone in the hospital, and you want your character to come across as kind and considerate, you donât want the first thing comes out of the characterâs mouth to be some horrible, brash joke. Youâll want to match the dialogue with the tone.
 If your reader cares about a character, humiliating them wonât make the character laugh. It will make them cry.
 âIf you have a genuinely serious or emotional scene, donât make that scene into a jokeâtreat it with the gravity it deservesâ
Comedy during a sincere high stakes/dramatic scene will take away from the moment. Readers will not like the interruption, especially if emotionally invested.Â
See the above link for more ideas!
 And this link as well: Tips for Writing Dark Stories, Settings, Characters
I also want to put out there that darkness is not bad! Sometimes darkness makes a novel or writing snippet more powerful. Sometimes the heaviness needs to be felt.Â
Hope this helps, and thank you for the ask!